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| Haarajot 2008-06-05 ch 45, | abuseIf you ever correct this chapter, you might change uncle to grandfather in the following line: 'Then I turned to go down and rejoin my uncle' |
| irini 2007-10-23 ch 53, anon. | abuseI was fascinated... |
| ScottishFaerie 2007-10-07 ch 53, | abuseYou are truly an inspired writer. I have read this story from start to finish(in one day no less!)and now I'm moving on to the rest of your stories. Thank you SO much for writing this! |
| crazylizzie 2007-08-03 ch 33, | abuseI honestly do not know if you will receive this review or not seeing it has been several years since you wrote this story, but I had to try because out of every single LOTR story with an OC this has to be the most thorough, complex, well thought out character I have come across. I am only a little more than halfway through and I have found every single character is right on, what I would imagine them to be like. Even the well known characters, as Aragon and Elrond, you did perfectly. And I love Heth, love her. She is strong and not very strong, independent and not, a story of dichotomy that works wonderfully in the world you have created. I am almost hesitant to keep reading because I worry of the ending... worry about the relations between Elrohir and Heth most especially. I very much like them together (would have probably voted for them to be the "nesting" couple, lol) but yet there seems to be quite a few obstacles before them and I would hate to have this end without a "happy" ending. Call me romantic (as long as you don’t say it to loud) but I want something more between them. Its about sex now, and the friendship of a lover bond/soul bond, but there is more there and I hope you did explain it. If not. Well... its still a lovely story. :) Anyway. Blabbed on for quite some time, when really I just wanted to compliment on a well written, well thought out story, with a lovely leading lady and an even lovelier supporting cast. Brava. |
| Mari Dúrdogreth 2007-03-19 ch 52, anon. | abuse-~-~-~-~-~-~ forgot: 40: I nodded. and 52: “ Very well 53: desert - dessert -~-~-~-~-~-~ 52&53: Usual Isabeau-quality :-) things slowed down a bit, that's why I'm not that excited and thrilled but I read them with great interest nevertheless! This is not the end to Heth's adventures? Are you going to write another 50-chapter-story? *g* wouldn't mind that ;-) Truly, things do seem a bit unfinished the way they are. But it's a brilliant story, all the same. This one's going to remain in my Firefox-Favourites, and who knows, maybe I'll even comply and sign up on one day ;D and add it to my favourites there. I didn't yet sign up because I felt there are already so many sites where I'm signed up, and I wouldn't leave the computer screen anymore at all if I did *g* Or maybe I was just too lazy *g* Ah, yes, and thanks a lot for many pleasant hours of reading! Best wishes, Mari |
| Mari Dúrdogreth 2007-03-18 ch 50, anon. | abuseWhuo! Wonderful one! A lot to laugh about, a lot to be astonished by, and in the end, a total turnabout in mood. Pity that I'll soon have finished reading the remaining chapters, but it's not that bad because there are so many other stories of yours to r&r. Mercilessly ^_^ ;-) Kind regards, Mari -~-~-~-~-~-~ Chapter name: The harper -> The Harper woodsy -> woody ? retreat -> retreat. .! I can say is -> What/All I can say is ? -~-~-~-~-~-~ |
| Mari Dúrdogreth 2007-03-18 ch 49, anon. | abuse-~-~-~- yeay - yay -~-~-~- That was very realistic, I think - her not knowing what to say. A very good chapter. I wonder what will happen in the remaining ones. You know, it's really hard to stop reading now!! ^^ but I promised myself I'd do a bit of work now - it's not that much anyway. Still, it's hard to stop *theatrical sob* ^__^ Best wishes, Mari |
| Mari Dúrdogreth 2007-03-18 ch 48, anon. | abuse47: - desert - dessert 48: in once place. - one - Very good, captivating and very atmospheric! I thought: "What could happen at yet another wedding that would be of interest?" ... well *g* ... your answer to this was very - see above *g* I don't exactly understand why Faramir is acting like this, but I guess as the storyteller, you know, and I'll just have to read on to see whether Hethlin's accusations, about him seeing her as his property, are correct or wrong. Anyway: Imrahil! If Hethlin HAS to marry someone or intend to do so by the end of the story, I wouldn't mind if it was him, I really like him in your fanfiction. But it's no use speculating - it's already finished and therefore there is no way I can gain some sneaky influence on the author as I usually try to *harharhar* ... just kidding. I usually don't try. It simply was long overdue that I applied some evil laugh. 0;-) Yours, Mari |
| Mari Dúrdogreth 2007-03-16 ch 46, anon. | abuse45: Nice chapter, I'm glad she finally chose to face her fear of that hill. The ending of this chapter is really creepy! ~_~° 46: Good one, too. Only thing that confused me was the leap in time. I think it would be better if you indicated "Two days later..." or something like it right at the beginning. Of course readers won't be wondering about what is going on this way, but it's really confusing the way it is right now. I first pondered whether it was possibly a dream she was having. Ah yes, and good she's been seeing Mablung again. But there are still some other rangers that have been badly neglected, too ;-). Wonder if she'll meet them again in some future chapter. Well, now it's off to bed. *yawns* |
| Mari Dúrdogreth 2007-03-16 ch 43, anon. | abuse43: Yay, she has family! *smiles* ingenious. And most intriguing. ^^ you always find new ways to give the plot unexpected turns... one surprise after the other :D! Now before I turn somersaults in my enthusisam, I'll type another page of the notes for my presentation and then return to the story once more. Though I really need to make some longer break at some point, or I will have finishes reading so soon. ^_^ - weathebeaten - weatherbeaten - 44: A lot of wonderful atmosphere, romantic, tense, funny and sad. Great dialogue. Thumbs up. Kind regards, Mari - most of the guests set to eating with a gusto the belied the fact that they’d had food to hand all afternoon. - that and that t is solely - |
| Mari Dúrdogreth 2007-03-16 ch 42, anon. | abuseDid I write nonsense about Hethlin having nothing than a brief acquaintance with the hobbits? I don't remember the according chapters in such detail anymore. Sry ^^° Wonderfully written! I'm always a little uneasy about chapters with hobbits - afaik, many ff-writers make them too cute. Usually I seem to be the only one who minds, though - whether because all others revel in their affection for the small-child-pattern or whether because I judge this too harshly, I don't know. But anyway: There's nothing to be discontent about here, you did brilliantly, and I'm all the more delighted for it :-). And I like it how you let your characters have and solve their arguments without getting out of character. If Imrahil is supposed to be polite, he will quarrel politely. If Hethlin is supposed to be quite mature, she will eventually act so. The noble people don't have no conflicts in your story, they just know how to cope with them in an adequate manner. Sounds simple, but I think it's marvellous. But enough of bootlicking, for now... ;-) Chapter 43 awaits, and that means there are only 10 left, and this doesn't sound nice, and what did I just say about boots? ^^° Kind regards, Mari |
| Mari Dúrdogreth 2007-03-16 ch 41, anon. | abuseChapter 40: Did I ask for more action? I should have known that you know when suspense is falling and the plot is in need of some breathtaking battles. Breathtaking it was! Chapter 41: ^^ nice comment about the library of Imladris *gg* hehe ^^. I wondered whether you wouldn't let her meet the hobbits at all - I mean meet longer than walking past them in some street *g* That was a very good chapter :-). Likeditlikeditlikedit. You really surprised me with Faramir and Aragorn there - I didn't expect that in the least. Nice =)! Yours, Mari - waking only when we stopped in the night to eat some supper, and fall right back - falling ? once. more. - once more. - |
| Mari Dúrdogreth 2007-03-14 ch 38, anon. | abuseConcerning chapter 38: “My heart is gladdened by the invitation to participate in a demonstration of your recovery, my lord prince,” - what a fine talk *laughs* That was a wonderful chapter! I can't say just what it was that made it so - everthing together, probably - but I'm in very good spirits now *g* and - this WILL sound strange - my ears are all hot, in theory my version of blushing, but happens rather when I'm a mix of delighted and excited ^^ - e to the stableman’s promise - superfluous paragraph - Concerning chapter 39: "Now, is there some particular reason... " Whuo, glad the teachers I had never told me something like that in my riding lessons ;D ^^° "... made me laugh ... " me too ^^ "... and when the stallion oofed, tightened the girth the last two notches he had hoped I would forget about. " *gg* Ah, that was a very good chapter, once again :-) Thanks a lot! Best wishes, Mari - woven.” “A Ranger... - now I THINK there is some particularity about English paragraphs when the one and the same person is speaking over a longer period of time. If this were correct, it would have to be: woven. “A Ranger... - |
| Mari Dúrdogreth 2007-03-14 ch 36, anon. | abuse@36: "None of the men wished to forego the battle:" says it's "forgo" in this usage. Mari herself doesn't know ^^ I didn't find anything else in the chapters 36 and 37 - except of course a very pleasant read and the expected Isabeau-quality of writing :-) Due to plot, the latest chapters (up to 37, that is) aren't as thrilling as the very first ones, but I still read them with great interest and ... joy? happiness? ah whatever it is exactly, I like reading them ^^ Yours, Mari |
| Mari Dúrdogreth 2007-03-13 ch 34, anon. | abuseDear Isabeau! @ch34: Another nice chapter. Not that much happened, but I liked reading it nonetheless. This eagle speech is really curious, and has his own tone to it that fits well. @ch35: ... that Weather Happens. I like that statement. ^^ By the way: however did you find out that there exist such things as horse litters? ^^ I never heard anything of them before I read your story. Very interesting. And a very good chapter, once more :-). Best wishes, Mari @34: - she declared - she declared. were unaware of my barreness.. @35: - May you journey to Edoras be swift and smooth.” us.. - |