Oh,Leon's jealous, is he?

Aw! Poor Dezir! Thank you Krystel for stopping that evil evil Leon from killing him!

*beam* Call me crazy!

WRITEMORE! *can't believe she's finally reached the end*

I really liked her thinking at the beginning. It gives her character depth, really.

Poor pathetic Krystel. Nobody wants to leave her alone, do they?

UGH! I can't believe he loves her! That is just so -irritating- to me! No offense to you, of course. Your writing style has actually improved greatly throughout this story...*impressed*

But your plot could use some work.. not a lot, but some.

SAD! Poor Dezir loves this girl, and there's no fair way they can be together! *pity pity*

Gr.. *growls at Leon*

Aw! Poor Gaeina-chan! *huggles the poor injured cat-girl* You were only doing your job as best you could! *sympathy*

Meh... more of the bad guy loving the good girl. Shoot me now.. oh well. It was well written, if somewhat rushed.. onto more!

Okay, my biggest qualm with this chapter? The fact that -all- of the action of her escaping was in -one freaking paragraph-! That and Dezir went from being really cool to... rather pathetic... *sigh* And he had such potential...

Oh well, I'm glad this is getting somewhere, though.

Okay, here's a question... how come Dezir was watching her? I thought he had a -war- to deal with!

He falls for her? UGH! *hates it when the super cool bad guy falls for the shoujou* That's like Hitomi falling for Dilandau! *hates that type of fanfiction*

But it was well written, short of the plot issues...

...you think as a really cool bad guy, Dezir would be slightly more on top of things... I mean, Fanelians are pathetic. They don't get under peoples noses that easily...

*gags* Ugh, Krystel is SUCH a typical main-character girl! *sigh* No offense, but she is driving me -crazy-!

well, that seemed rather pointless.. o.o Oh well! MOre later!

Actually, I really liked how you did this chapter! *beam*

And I just decided I really like Dezir! Count on my to like the bad guy! n_n

Actually, this chapter was rather well written... there could have been a little more detail and action and whatnot leading up to the kidnapping. It just kinda... happened... like the cliff. *sigh*

Oh well, happy writing! Maybe I'll go read chapter fifteen... hm...

*_*

*stare* That whole thing with Merle-chan and Folken-sama was so... weird... o.o I don't get it.

*confused*

Okay, whatever. If it works for you!

Read more on Wednesday!

*beam*

Love you!

(yes, I do say that, and I mean it! I really like your story, despite all the -constructive- critism! I just want more Dilandau! *shine*)

*actually had time for TWO chapters today*!

Okay, I have a question. If she was betrothed from birth... does that mean they knew she would be coming back? Or is it just a loophole? Or am I just crazy? Could be the last one...hm...

*beams at the mention of Dilandau* *_* *obsessed*

You're probably tired of me saying this but... there was -nothing- leading up to the cliff incident! It just happened! Things don't -just- happen! O

Oh well, obviously I like the story enough to keep reading! *_*