So I wanted to read some of your other work and I must say the darkness of this impressed me. Though it was difficult to read because of the large paragraphs and the speech to be structured more so it doesn't get lost. But saying that is is brilliantly described and thought out, keeping with the dark emotion throughout well done. xx

Pretty dark, my only complaint about the story is that it is hard to read because you don't break up your paragraphs enough.

Yay, a happy ending! Good work.

Almost made a mistake Roland!

Nice start