OMG I really almost threw my computer my bleach OC is Yumi's little sister so I was like really guys yumi's right you have swords and your soul reapers come on now lol But great story!

wow-that was...crazy odd. 0_0 I kinda feel bad for Yumi.

POOR YUMI

Poor Yumichika!

I hope that was Ikkaku's mouth sucking Yumi off...

Now that was interesting, poor Yumichika!

Very well written, but a warning for non-con would have been nice since this is blatant sexual abuse.

A warning for OOC could be useful as well, since there's no way the Eleventh could be forcefully made to stick around if they didn't want to, especially not with Ikkaku among them. Or at least make it clear that Ikkaku is sadistically enjoying this, and don't make him be all nice and concerned for Yumichika at the end; it just doesn't match.

Other than that, as I said, the technique is really good, no doubt about that.