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A Tickle fight? What a great idea, but next time, why not use Shego and Dr. Drakken? Imagine seeing them in the hospital and all because of a tickle fight.

Although, Shego would get so angry somebody, (maybe even Dr. D.) could get hurt seriously.

God Bless,

Larry

It was a funny story, don't worry.

I can clearly see how the original idea would have been pretty hilarious (I've had similar ideas, not all made it to stories though), but I also understand that a story will never be as good as you have seen it in your imagination (at least, if your flow of thought is any similar to mine).

Anyway good job,

keep up the good writing,

reader101w

This was funny. Evil chuckle funny. Heh heh heh heh...

I don't think I have ever known someone needing to go to the hospital from a tickle fight, but I have seen some nasty injuries as a result. However, put a teen hero and a monkey master in a tickle fight, and go ahead and call the EMTs. Great one-shot.

One wee nitpick: it should be peals of laughter, rather than peels.

That was cute. It could only happen to those three. Ferret girl panties...hehehehe...

Poor Rufus. he was just being a loyal Naked Mole Rat to his human and got squished for his troubles

This is pure classic KP. You are so at your best as the characters come to life in this amazing one-shot.

You have written Anne exactly as she was on the show while keeping just the right amount of angst between the intrepid pair of heroes and naked mole rat as they quiver in fear waiting for the other shoe to drop.

Anne now has enough blackmail on her daughter and Ron to really keep them in check for sometime to come. If James ever finds out "Black Hole Deep" will have new meaning for Ron and poor Kimmie-cub will never leave her room in her lifetime. LOL

How you write these fun little stories is truely wonderful. You have such a talent for getting just the right amount of humor in your scenes as well as balancing everything with the correct amount of drama.

Well scripted and written. Pace and flow spot on. What more could a reader or reviewer ask for?

This made a terrific bedtime story last night for kt. She hasn't laughed that hard in quite sometime. “Rufus! Help! Tickle Attack Pattern Delta Eye Vee!” will live as one of the best lines ever.

Bet you never thought that you'd rate as a read outloud bedtime author.

kt did wonder for a moment if a certain Mim and Jon story inspired a certain tickling moment.

I told her I'm not going there. LOL

Til the next story.

ja

Nice one Whitem. I could see that happening to them.

The humor is more of a snicker than a guffaw caliber. This story is a guilty pleasure.

Well maybe it was for the best Ron tripped up... it could have gotten a bit too hot, otherwise? :)

Yep! I can see that happening to these two. The perfect example of the Ron Factor gone horribly wrong. This was an amusing tale done with style. Give yourself a pat on the back for this one.

Fearless Ferret girl panties? Snort!

Funny story. You really paint a good picture here, I'd agree that this is a case of something Kim's dad REALLY doesn't need to or want to know about. :)

Always nice to see Ron keeping Kim's inner child intact.

Keep it up!

OK Whitem if you're going to leave it here, it's pretty innocent...however given your reputation I's say you have a good beginning to a longer ARC. Maybe revisiting this about 15 years down the road. Same thing, but this time standing next to Dr Possible is an 8 year old girl with blond hair and green eyes glaring at the two tapping her foot...

Hey just an idea,

Larry (Sentinel 103)

Haha. I really loved the humor here, whitem. Great job. :D

It might not have been the bust-a-gut laugh riot you pictured in your head, but it was funny as heck. Don't underestimate the reader imagination. I'm sure you've given everyone a much needed chuckle.