very nice story

Very cute! Very lemony in more ways than one!

wow... I dont even like lemon meringue pie...but now I want some!

loolz hilarious!

at first i didnt get y he stopped breathing..

it all makes sense now.

P

very nice and lemon-y!
I don't think Edward broke her truck though.. that thing was bound to die.. that's probably the one good thing that happened in Edward's favor in the whole freakin book.

Please, use spell check. 'Curst' is not a word, neither is 'kakis.' 'Crust,' however, is, along with 'khakis.' Also, when someone says an erection is 'very hard,' especially their own, it sounds juvenile, and as if they have to assure us, the reader, that they are hard. We're not children, here. Let's not write like that, or have our characters act like it. PLEASE, try actually SAYING your dialogue out loud, so that it makes sense OUTSIDE of your head. And don't forget quotation marks on either end. You've got good ideas, just poor execution.

TDL

Very well written Janet! Excellent grammar and spelling. (I'm a teacher, so I'm a little obsessed with an author's writing mechanics.) So...well done there.

Now...to the "lemon". LOL Very well written sex scene. I found myself squirming in my seat and wishing the hubby was home! LOL Excellent mental image of Edward and Bella on the kitchen table!

LOVED IT! THANK YOU!

Wow!

that was hot...yum haha

Nice fic, it was different so good job on the plot..well I say plot :P but you know what I mean

really good story...

loved it

I want pie now... hm.. I loved it

I kinda want some Lemon Meringue Pie now! Like not even being perverted. My great-grandma makes the best pie ever! :) LOL. I really enjoyed reading this. You're a great writer.