You have great potential as a writer, however, like some of the other reviewers, I agree that some future improvements can be made. 1st and most important: How did Michiru get pregnant? If the child is BOTH Haruka and Michiru's genetically, it would have to be a girl. lastly: like someone else said, Michiru is giving birth on the ground. (On the dirt, it looks like) That is pretty unsanitary and I don't see Haruka letting Michiru give birth on the dirt without at least a towel/blanket/jacket or something underneath.

Otherwise, you are a great writer! Keep it up!

Bwuahahahahahaha! What a warm and humourous story! Thanks again for sharing!

I LOVED it! I had been wanting to write a fic similar to this. I sure am glad that you wrote it and not me!

I loved the reference of "I want you to touch me gently."

Melda Hearts Haruka

The story in itself is nice and all yadayada, but there is a serious point I am very concerned with and it is that you are letting Michiru giving birth on the ground. There is no question of plaid or blanket of any kind or form, so had Michiru direct contact to the ground? You know Dear, maybe you've heard somewhere of TETANOS, so next time do a little research, will you?

I would have installed Michiru actually in the car (the car was already ruined, so some blood stains wouldn't have made a big difference)

There's this site where people rag on everyone else's stories, and they decided to rip on both this and Fulfillment:

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Really nice story!
But how can they have a SON (besides haruka and Michiru are both women and ...)? Even if it would be possible for two women to have a child with their own genes(two X-chromosomes), than it would ALWAYS be a girl.

That was a great fanfic homes. However, can I ask you a question? How did a woman and another woman have a boy? Now that may be a wierd question because it is not physically possible for two women to make a child. I wish it were possible though. In the future I wish my femme lover and I could have a child.

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Hey cool fic _ But i dont understand one thing how can thier baby be of Haruka and Michiru if Michiru needed a sperm donder so how can they say that that they created a child when i want really Michiru and the donner that created the child. This is not a flame its just a question from a courius person you can e-mail me or im me on aol to anwser _

Road Rage Setsuna GO! Yes! I think we all know that the normally calm Setsuna harbors a demon within. Whahahahaha! It's always the quiet ones. As for Haruka delivering the baby...is there anything that girl CAN'T do? Michiru's labor was really easy too. It could have taken 24 hours, but she got that baby out in like 45 minutes. How lucky is that! :) And you can't blame Setsuna. I would have driven in traffic for hours before remembering that I could just warp through time too. Goooooooooo SUNA!

Nice fic! I thought the Setsuna with a mini-van was a bit interesting and funny. But poor Michiru...giving birth in haruka's car! That had to leave some stains .

I...confused...how can two women have a baby? O_o...was Michiru artifically inseminated? ::falls over, confused::

This is good but I wanna ask how on earth they did have a son? I mean, okay it's just about the genes...and how...Haruka got Michiru pregnant...

Flexing her hand within the

powerful grip, she smiled softly and whispered to her darling, "Michiru,

Love, I - want you to touch me gently."

I LOVED that bit! Great! _ Teehee!

I've finished the entire series. Excellent story. I want to hear about Haruka and Michiru raising the little bundle of joy.