cute

This was great, I liked it.:)

Loved it! It's going a bit too fast but that's not really bad xD Please continue the good work :)

Welcome to the lower birth... the greatest show unearthed... we appear without a sound.. the darkest show around.. we will leave you in a daze.. madness murder dismay.. we are disappeared with blood on the concrete... (the greatest show unearthed creature feature) nice. Story

Not bad. Please continue it :)

sweetnesss

love it

update soon please

I'm really enjoying your story! Please continue writing! ;-)

Thank you so much, this is by far the best story I have. :D

OMG!

i love it

sundrop and jack would be an awsum couple

I just edited all my chapters for the better finally, thank you all for commenting! :D

continue with da story soon

Sorry, I haven't read it, but I thought I'd let you know; more people would read it if you didn't "big yourself up" at the end of the summary :/

XD your so wickedly awesome...

Really good plot and storyline. I love how sarcastic and how much of a smart aleck Sundrop is, I've always been fond of characters like that. I also like that she's Mother Nature's daughter, that's unique. I'm interested in seeing more.

Just two things I'd like to suggest though, if you don't mind. It would be easier to read if you separated the paragraphs more. Plus the story would flow more naturally if the dialogue was more in story form, example being this- Instead of Mother Nature: "dialogue", you'd use Mother Nature said "dialogue". Just suggestions.

Really good overall. I'd like to see some updates. By the way, loved that Peanut quote. ;D

You're dialogue is really good. And it's a good idea. Few suggestions thought.

Space out your paragraphs. Every time a character speaks, that's a new paragraph.

Don't be too eadger to get to the romance. Set up and setting the scene is a very powerful thing for the imagination. Paint the picture you see playing out in your head with words so the reader can see what the characters are seeing. The places, the colors, the smells, the tastes. Also I have a question. what parent...in their right mind...mother nature or not...would leave their daughter alone for a year with Jack Frost? I suggest Sunny being the one to suggest it. But Mother Nature turns her suggestion around and makes her be the one to watch Jack (and Father Time is adament against it) And maybe not a year. Maybe until Christmas.

I was also confused about the cage action sequences. I just didn't get it.