This was fun. Sweet, with an interesting plot - what could be better?

One problem: "naieve" should be spelled "naïve". (You get the ï by pressing Alt139.)

Cute, naturally. And from me, you know that's a very high compliment :D I can't believe no one else reviewed.

There's just one sentence that needs fixing (yes, I'm editing, that's just who I am).

“I will once I reabsorb the power I use in making the first is not as though we must leave it open.”

I think you need "first. It is not"

Voila! Cute, though sadly I seem to be the only one who has noticed.