|Reviews for The Coach's Daughter|
| smkelover 11/29/12 . chapter 18
| Alex B. Goode 12/1/11 . chapter 18
| Samwich520 6/24/11 . chapter 18
So, I liked the story. However, I have some comments.
1. You switch between the past and present tenses and it gets a little confusing.
2. Also, I'm not saying this to be rude, but some of your grammar seems to be a bit off. Not horribly off, just a tad.
3. If I recall correctly, you used the smashing the car scene twice within the story. The first time came before Emma and Ray showed up at the diner they were eating at to tell Gerry and Helen that Emma knows about the kiss and that Emma and Ray are dating. The second time you describe the scene in detail. You also have Emma tell Gerry that she's dating Ray a second time, in the scene that she tells Gerry that she is going to try and get used to the integration.
I hope you don't mind my comments, they're meant to be constructive and helpful.
| shippolove844 1/6/11 . chapter 18
hehe I love it, so sad its over
| DamonandBonnie4ever 12/31/10 . chapter 17
AWWWW I love the Gerry and Helen scene! I can't wait for more! :)
| kAsS3695 12/12/10 . chapter 17
The second option. Everyone likes a happily ever after.
| Louella 12/8/10 . chapter 17
Well, the true story was that Gerry was in an accident after the state final game, around the time of the football banquet, but the movie made it before the state finals to be more dramatic. I'm really excited to see what you do with it though! Update soon please!
| x XRoweenaJAugustineX x 12/8/10 . chapter 17
the first option is sad but sticks to the true events and your prolouge.
BUT, I admit, I like the second one better. so Yeah, my vote is the second.
| shippolove844 12/2/10 . chapter 17
The second one is the best you gotta do that one, I dont want him to die, maybe she could get hurt, like break a leg in the acident but he's fine, soo yea The 2nd one is my fav and the one I hope you pick
| Nekokitten1123 12/2/10 . chapter 17
i liked the second one better than the first one. post soon
| DamonandBonnie4ever 12/2/10 . chapter 16
| shippolove844 12/1/10 . chapter 16
I really liked this chaptr its my favorit so far,aww Garry is soo cute and he's a pervcand I hope he wont get into that accident well pleas update soon I love this story
| shippolove844 11/29/10 . chapter 15
aww yes they are finaly together Hehe so happy :3 I cant wait fo the next one
| kAsS3695 11/29/10 . chapter 15
love that chapter
| shippolove844 11/26/10 . chapter 14
yes soo happy they are together now