Love this story! I was really hesitant to read it because I normally don't like stories where the Teams got all mixed up, but I think you've done a great job! I am loving this older version of Naruto, and the changes you've made to everything/everyone. Especially the differences you have in this version of the Chuunin exams! Simply genius. I also love what you've done with the Sand Sibs, so unique!

I can't wait to see what happens in the next round of the Exams! With 3 jinchuuriki in the same place at once anything can happen! :)

Update again soon!

lilah

Ironically, if Orochimaru is behind the void village like his was the sound in canon, Kuukuugakure sounds(pun intended) like his creepy laugh: Ku ku ku ku! ...Lolololol... wait,... that laugh is creepier than Orochimaru's... Gaaaaah!

*runs away*

Audience: Trolololololooooooo!

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Kauris:Nnnnnooooooooooo!

KA

Hey, it's an amazing story you have there. The AU is well-thought and the characters are believable, recognizable despite the obvious changes on their personalities brought by a different setting. Hope you keep updating!

Now down to business. I've just got a question to ask and a mistake to point:

First the question: are you going to say why the war with the Rock started, and has it something to do with the canon kidnapping attempt of Hinata?

Now the mistake: in part 2 chapter 4, near the end where Itachi is looking at the Hokages Monument, there's this thingy: Even the fifth, now outcast, had much to teach him [him meaning Itachi]. I guess you meant the fourth.

"Is it desirable,if so? Let me know. :P"

Ironically it appears that the beta either tacked the note on the end of this super fast with no time for proofreading, or that he REALLY needs a beta of his own. Not exactly inspiring of confidence.

Ha! I may have missed the first one, but I caught this one!

"The girl who had woken him up in the middle of the night crooning in iambic pentameter about lathering his body with her tongue came to mind; he shuddered slightly as the memory returned."

I wasn't really sure what to think at first. Minato, NOT the yondaime? But Danzo is? And Naruto older? Somehow, the part of my brain that just wants to enjoy a good story took it all in stride. Thank you, brain, because this is *wonderful*.

I absolutely adore your characterization of Naruto. He's older, wiser, etc but he's still NARUTO. He loves easily, gives all of himself to his precious people, and is as kick-ass as a shinobi can be. His teaching scenes (insane methods and all) are my favorite. I could easily read a whole story of just those scenes. They're that good.

I also really like the way you make this story feel canon, with so many things NOT. The wave country arc, the chuunin exam... by now, I've read those so many times in fics that they feel old. Not yours. Your scenes feel fresh, but still somehow manage to be true to the original.

And the way you did the teams! LOVE the way you chose to split up the Ino-Shika-Cho trio, dumping Shikamaru on Sasuke and Hinata's team. I never thought the three of them would work so well together, but they do, they really do.

Can't wait to read more!

I really love the story so far, I finished it all today and just couldn't stop reading. But something that's bothering me is in the introduction in the first chapter, you said Naruto had the Kyuubi sealed in him when he was 5. In most stories I've read and in the cannon, a demon can only be sealed right after birth, not 5 years after. If this was intentional, please let me know if not, i think it would be cool if Baritone had more trouble using the kyuubi's power than in cannon. Well, hope to see another update soon, keep up the good work,

Sincerely Lounger

Pretty decent story so far, but there's a few things I find a bit objectionable.

1) Granted, I don't know how strong Naruto is yet, which makes this less significant of a concern, however it appears you've made Itachi quite a bit stronger than him. That is the impression one gets anyway. However there's no reason for this as Naruto by age 18 should be well beyond Kage level, strong enough that people like Zabuza should have been a bug by comparison.

Naruto was only like 15 at the oldest when Pain attacked Konoha - by that time he had mastered the Rasenshurikan, Sage mode, etc. This is for canon Naruto who appears to be far less privileged in teachers and outside help than your Naruto, who for one thing has access to all his fathers notes and jutsu. In other words he should be -far- stronger than he is in canon. Yet the only way this could be true is if you made Itachi several orders of magnitude stronger than he was in canon - which simply appears to be absurd. Itachi at age 15 wouldn't have been even close to Naruto's strength at 15.

In other words there is zero justification for Itachi to be as strong as Naruto at an equivalent age, let alone stronger. If you were talking about the early years of their life then absolutely, however there's a -huge- disparity in power levels as they enter their teens.

2) I can only hope this supposed marriage contract isn't between Sasuke and Hinata, because that is fucked up. They are so wrong for each other it isn't even funny. Actually Sasuke is just wrong for everyone, lol. If it's for Naruto & Hinata I'd be cool with it, yet I can't seriously see that being done. I don't really see how either pairing benefits Itachi anyway.

3) The timelines with Naruto's childhood are incredibly hard to work out. At first I thought Naruto was born 5 years earlier and that the Kyuubi attacked five years earlier; because going by canon that is the ONLY way Naruto can possibly be the jinchuuriki. But it seems instead that Naruto had the Kyuubi sealed in him at age five, something that is canonically impossible. It also means Minato raised Naruto, which in my view completely invalidates his goofy attitude. I always saw his attitude in canon as a byproduct of his neglectful childhood; take that away and you've really got no justification for writing him as the same way.

Now this is an amazing story and method in which you have created. I am highlly intrigued by where you are going in this stoy and cannot wait to continue on into the life of Namikaze Naruto.

Until next chapter.

I found this fic as a recommendation on TV Tropes (congrats!) and I couldn't be happier. It's exceedingly well written, well at the same time not going into poetry territory which in all honesty, is just dry. I have a feeling that it's going to explode into something big sometime soon.

I think I'll have to take a leaf out of your book for fight scenes. They're concise, but detailed enough not to seem disappointing.

Thank you for your hard work.

Brilliant story, with unique deviations.

Can't wait to see more

Good chapter! I liked Sasuke being puzzled by how he suddenly feels close to his team.

Okay I just read all 12 chps. and all I can say is wow. What a great story. The best thing I can say about the story is that the story has a fresh feel to it. I love the level of detail present in the story. For example the scen where Naruto takes a nap in chp 11. I also love that the story feels original and that's hard to find on this site anymore. You've left me wanting more, in a good way, despite the fact that I've spent the better part of three hours reading every word of the story.

Moving on to the story Hinata's just having a bad day huh? First she hears Anko's muttering then she makes her first kill. I'm guessing she's gonna need a long talk after this. It's been interesting to see how different this world is from the cannon universe. Of course it's still funny that Hinata still harbors feelings for Naruto. The more things change and all that I guess. Anyway, amazing story and I cannot wait to see how this story progresses. One final note, its a travesty that this story only has 200 reveiws. Seriously this should be in the 1000's. Fantastic job man.

Hi, I wanted to let you know I like this story. Usually when people do the Naruto given a team Idea it usually fizzles out after a few chapters, you howerver are doing quite well!

I was just wondering, Naruto was on Itachis team. How strong is he?

Thanks for writing!

have Naruto actually date Kurenai... like, she actually a bit jealous of Naruto and such... cause the Anko/Naruto thing seems too much like a fling to go anywhere, the way you wrote it out just seems like it wouldn't be a good pairing... also, make Sasuke grow some balls and talk to Hinata about her problems, than she might slowly get over her crush on Naruto...