i don't really like it i agree it is stupid

Firstly, thank you for reviewing my story. Secondly, this story moves extremely slowly in my perspective. Even though elaborating is much wanted, this is a bit too much. Not a lot of people want a story too in depth. Still, I think it's amazing how you put so much detail.

This story, while good in premise (rather like Cave Story) is very choppy. Nothing in it flows together like a story should. It gives all of the events, of course, but there's little to no transition between one event and the next.

[Is there some way of telling what it is, or am I, was the I I was a person who already knew, does everyone but me know these things?]

This sentence makes little sense. I think it would've been better said this way:

[Is there some way of telling what it is? Perhaps I knew what it was at some point. Does everyone else already know these things?]

This story is stupid

psh. all of that ninsense about my story being bad? maybe you should see your own. and that "the story starting about your character waking up" crap? look what you did here? this story sucks overall anyway

why in the world is this in the Pokemon archive?

It's not that great of an idea

why in the world is this in the Pokemon archive?

It's not that great of an idea

This is terrible. look up basic grammer before you post.

So, what do I think of this story?

THIS FIC SUCKS!

WHAT THE HELL? WHY DID YOU MAKE THIS PIECE OF CRAP?

Your writing sucks, it's too straight forward, there's so many mistakes, and this story just blows overall!

READERS: Don't read this story, read a better story! There are better stories out there than You

I really liked the premise to this.

As everyone else is saying, yes the writing is choppy. But the choppy writing goes along with this 'type' of story - or I guess the story's subject matter.

I see no need to continue. But while it lasted, I thoroughly enjoyed it!

I loved this meta... thing. I favorited this a while ago, but felt compelled to drop a "review" (or more like a general comment).

I'm not gonna embarass myself by trying to claim that I "got it". I just loved the feel of the thing. Even if the events described here feel pretty mundane in the game, somehow the whole thing feels eerie and sort of... wrong. Maybe it has a point that I don't realize because I can't think outside the box or maybe this was just your way of laughing at those who overanalyze the thing.

Either way, it's a thing of beauty.

- Zokolov

Original but choppy. I'm not particularly a fan of your writing style, but to each their own. You have more original thoughts than me (apparently), I'll give you that much. And in case you think this is some hate review because you said my writing was lazy and pathetic; it's not. This time you didn't mention any problems in grammar, so I guess I've improved since the first time you reviewed me (which I'm sure you don't remember, because you're right, that one was bad).

Simply giving my two cents. I appreciate your honesty, but not the way you present your opinion as law. And I appreciate your originality, but your lack of a nice clear flow made it difficult for me to enjoy reading this story. I felt as if I was waiting for something to happen that whole time; it was a clever narrative, yet one that felt hollow. Clearly correct and 'good' writing, but I believe your style could improve. That being said, it's been several months since this was written, so you're surely better by now.

Finessefully,

X

Huhu. Is this meant to be a parody of the beginning of Red/Blue? It seems like the 'I' character is the person getting controlled by some external person, and he does all the things that anyone would do when first starting a Pokemon game.

If so, it's about the most creative thing I've read on the website.

I found it quite funny how the main character just 'brushes away' all the plot holes that do arise within the story.

The only thing I didn't like was the fact that 'I' talked. It seemed out of character for 'I' to actually ask a question, and also to betray his lack of knowledge. It would probably have been better if 'I' had just noted that Item Storage was something that revolutionized the world and left it at that.

I don't think this story should be extended. It's perfect the way it is. Please mark it complete. 9/10

Oh wow, this is a pretty interesting topic to write on. Definitely a new take on things (and will probably change my perspective on FireRed since that's the only game I have that starts in Kanto...)

I would be lying if I said that the ending is alright in its own (I actually want to know what happens after this. Or maybe we, the readers, will be left alone to think of what the true ending could be...) I had the same problem before (wondering where the heck Professor Oak could be. I mean, I remember 'mom' mentioning not to go in the tall grass and then it turns out we have to approach it in other to continue the storyline.)

Uuh, yeah. Good job on this one. :)

It's pretty fun. A little slow, but stories/drabbles of this sort generally are... :)