wow is all i can say definate has my attention

Well I've read this story so far and i can not stay silent. I will admit that you have a fairly good writing style, the story plot is fairly interesting but there are so many things that just keep bugging me about this story.

For one: How the past Justin could so easily figure out that "Ashley" Was Alex with no actual proof or substance. I mean it would have made more sense for Alex to say something along the lines of "I care- I mean she does care." As in she slipped up. That would have made it more realistic for Justin to connect the dots that the person who he was talking to was his sister from the future.

And when Justin says "You don't look like a Ashley." ANd later on when he said. "You don't look like a Gomez, you look more like a Russo." ...Seriously?

I how can he tell that she doesn't look like an Ashley or a Gomez? A person's name doesn't define their look, and also the fact taht he said she looked like a Russo, while yes technically she is, it just's terrible dialouge. I honestly think that if your serioulsy still writing this it would be better to re-do it, probably fix up a few garmmar mistakes while you at it. Perhaps do a big clean up on the interactions between characters because reading how they act and talk it just feels so awkard.

Make the story a bit more believable, give it life and substance. Don't just jump into something by trying to make it work. Reading this story is like trying to put a circile into a square cut out, it won't work right, you gotta carve out the edges and make the story more refined, get a beta-reader, someone who seriously will tell you if your story is good or bad.

Don't tihnk that i see this as a terrible story. In all honesty i see potential, your sentences aren't all that bad, it's just hte dialouge, and the certain aspects of the plot needs a overhaule.

wow i love your story! it is so amazing and i can't wait to see what happens next!

You neeeeed to update. I absolutely adore this story! 3

PLEASE continue! It's really good, I like it so far! :D

Another great chapter keep up the good work!

THANK YOU so so much for not giving up on this story. I found it very interesting but since it was not updated for such a long time I had almost given up hope. But I was pleasantly surprised when I saw this update.

I think Harper being OOC is totally believable. Without Alex she probably wasn't strong enough to stand up to Gigi on her own, resulting in her current state. Great chapter. Looking forward to the rest of the story. Please do update ASAP.

Just read the whole story and I love it! You need to update ASAP! )

great chapter by the way... At least she's not going to give up. And short chapters give you something to wonder about, so you don't have to keep appologizing :)

Great story!

so liking this so far :)

This is a very interesting story. I came across it just yesterday & read all the chapters in one go.

I like it. Very imaginative & nicely written.

So, Good job! Looking forward to your next update.

ah! i can't wait to read more! XD

Aw no! Alex can't forget Justin's her brother [ She can't forget the way they were before, the way they bickered and the way she wished she knew her brother better before everything went bad. Gr rawr.

Update soon!

This is a good read.

Can't wait to read the rest..:)