What luck that I stumbled on this! I didn't know that you had started a new story. The premise is tres interesting thus far, and the characters look to be a little more complex than your run of the mill Mary Sues. I wholeheartedly believe that you'll endeavor to make this a MS-less piece, and furthermore I think that you'll succeed at that! Already Natasha looks to be her own person. (And she isn't a daddy's girl that's for sure!)

Wonderful job on the dialogue, characters and intro. I'll sit here in my armchair and wait for chapter 3.

Glad I got to read your new chapter here. Took a bit of time to settle into the "month before" situation...you described the "climate" and specifics as well of the room & situation well, though. Emotions, conversations, and plan were made-clear. I liked that, even in the # being five people in the room, different opinions and explanations were there. You also wove back in the connection to Natasha and what she was doing where she was in Chapter 1 in a way that didn't seem abrupt to me, that seemed to fit, connecting with the action of the chapter. Looking forward to reading more with a greater understanding of the background. Thanks for sharing and best wishes to you...

Hey! Went to look at your Grievous Redemption and noticed this new story! Am enjoying having new characters to consider and the idea of a character who has a different perspective than the Gears do, character development and comment on situation from her perspective as well as others', etc. Hope that more will be coming...and all the best.

The chapter moves rather well, keeping a steady pace while the brain tries to catch up with the traumatic event. Hopefully, you'll keep the pace steady as the story evolves into the chapters following it...

The only issue I see was the opening sentence. I believe you would have done the beginning a little more justice if you described her immidiate senses first, then her detestations of the situation second...but again, that's just me.

Otherwise, I don't have a problem with female leads as long as they're not running around in skimpy outfits while dodging bullets at the same time, taking out a legion and coming out of the menegerie unscathed...and then sleeps around with the alpha males...lol