I LOVED this. This second person was wicked good! Your imagery was amazing.

That was really nice. Cool... I really liked it, 'specially the cigarette part...

While that was spectacular second-person writing, but I don't know if second-person is allowed on the site... but I'm not sure because this is also Dallas' point of view... hmm.

So, if you've got anyone on your back about it, that's why.

Well, Great Job!

DHF out.