Very sad. You write angst and heart break very well.

wow, very emotional, very sad, but beautifully written. You described her feelings very very well, it's just perfect.

Very sad and beautiful. I think I rather like the short length, it held the point and retained the emotion of the work. I can't wait to read more.

Beneaththefalls

So sad, but so good! I like how I spent most of it trying to put the pieces together to figure out what was going on, but that, by the end, it was perfectly clear.

So very sad. So beautifully written. Wonderful.

So intense and powerful. I love every singe word and image. Being stuck, feeling the death inside, the inability to separate thought from feeling from being. It is beautiful in its starkness and pain. Excellent writing. (I hope you are not writing from experience. I wouldn't wish this on anyone.)

This piece was utterly heartbreaking, but beautiful to read. At first I was unsure as to what had happened, but the seventh paragraph explained it all without the words, and I love the way you're able to do that.

You said it was the shortest, but I didn't even notice. It was amazing :)

Taylor.

Heartcrushing...

WOW! heartbreaking and wonderfully written piece total devisation of both of them especailly her. look forward to more soon

Wow. This actually hurt to read. Anyone's who's ever had a friend in this situation (or, god forbid, personal experience) knows the utter and complete devestation.

Your imagery is beautiful. It's raw, but incredibly effective.

This is heart breaking, but so real and beautifully written.

What a very touching story. I agree I think it is the shortest piece you have written, but sometimes less is more.

I didn't know where you were going with this story, till the second last chapter. How sad, for them both, this was a very deep well written story.

Keep up the great writing.

aww I really really liked this oneshot. LOVELY WRITING!