I know its been a while since you started but I hope getting good feedback will encourage you to keep going! A really interesting start

Wow, this is very well written. I can definitely feel the emotion coming through. I look forward to finding out more!

Mysterious. I like this idea, it's really interesting. Please update soon! I can't wait! :P

:O

That's so beautifully sad, and makes me kind of tear up.

I just realised how unemotional my emoticon actually seems.

Update soon please, I sense Lily taking this out on someone.

I love it.

oh, interesting.

update soon, please.