|Reviews for Back to the Beginning|
| ifan13 10/18/12 . chapter 1
I liked this exercise of a dialogue only scenario - it was very interesting and it was fun (as the reader) to try to guess what exactly was going on. Plus, the fic concept was very cute :)
| Lothlorien Aeterna 9/7/11 . chapter 1
hahaha, poor Cho ;)
| Arcadya 4/4/10 . chapter 1
I so figured out it was a board game, I even thought Snakes and Ladders... mainly because that game is so frustrating. I figured it just had to be some kind of game that relied heavily on chance adn nothing much else. It was the only plausible thing, especially once you revealed the 'dice'.
And you're dialogue only was very clear. Great Job!
| simonisthecutestmentalist 2/1/10 . chapter 1
i liked this story dialogue, really neat! :0)
| yunarow 1/28/10 . chapter 1
A very nice and funny story! If you don't mind, I would like to post it translated into french (as I'm french,and I noticed there is still only one mentalist fanfiction in french). I would put your penname, title of the story and link in the summary. I already made the translation, so if you want I can send it to you so you could read it and tell me if it's okay. Of course, I'll wait for your approval before posting anything.
| Aquila1 1/25/10 . chapter 1
Very clever. The plot dawned on me just before the very end and had me laughing out loud. Really nicely done.
| lgmtreader 1/24/10 . chapter 1
ROTFL! great success at your dialogue-only (mostly) fic! You really had me going for awhile (which of course you intended :-). The ending was awesome. Still smiling! (Poor Cho!)
| Frogster 1/24/10 . chapter 1
I have to disagree with Cho. I find Jane and Lisbon's prolonged banter extremely amusing. :D
“I’m sorry Lisbon, but that’s ridiculous. You’ve been facing me this whole time so I don’t see how I could possibly be doing anything behind your back.” :D Sounds like my dad.
“So you’re the stuff of legend now are you Jane?” :D He thinks he is, at least.
I like the idea of challenging yourself to write something that is different from what you normally write. It sounds interesting. Although if I tried it, it would probably mean that I would have to write like Yana, making my sentences short(er) and more to the point. Saying so much in so little words. Which for me is extremely hard.
Think Lisbon needs a daycare license? Or a leash? Or both? :D
| Alamo Girl 1/24/10 . chapter 1
How hard is it to do it all in dialog? Wow! But I really like this. It's fun, introspective, but light.
And I may be totally naughty, but for a minute I was having the "over-heard" misunderstanding vibe going on. But, I'll blame it on exhaustion.
“So you’re the stuff of legend now are you Jane?”
“You’re certainly arrogant enough for it.”
“Be nice. Ah ha. There’s a smile.”
- LOVE this. I love to think that Lisbon has the needles to try to pop Jane's ego balloon.
| MK 1/24/10 . chapter 1
That was funny! I thought they were gambling in Vegas, but having them torture Cho with their bickering is so much better!
| Divinia Serit 1/24/10 . chapter 1
AW! HL that was brilliant! I absolutely loved the big reveal, and Cho's exasperation. Congratulations on the dialogue! I applaud you for that :D Great job!
| lisbon69 1/24/10 . chapter 1
Hilariously funny! brilliant!
| lil smiles 1/24/10 . chapter 1
Bwahahahaha! You said this was fluffy, but poor Cho! Oh the abuse! I think we need to set up a 'Rescue Cho' fund or something.
This was a great little piece, definitely a departure from your other projects but still, wonderful. Again, you're one of the few people who can get the Jane/Lisbon banter, spot on! I can actually see the two of them in the backseat of the SUV bickering.
Awesome entry! Just a pleasure to read!
| Tallie14 1/24/10 . chapter 1
lmao, loved it! so funny and amazing!
| yaba 1/24/10 . chapter 1
hahaha! That was funny! I think it was brilliant how you managed to set up a scene and drop hints of the setting and what they were doing just into the dialogue. Great Job. Sometimes, I feel writers think that dialogue is the easy part and the description is difficult and though sometimes it is, to me dialogue can be quite a difficult vessel through which to evoke emotion, and you totally did it here. great job! I love it :)