heh nice

Cute :3

"Iz my turn," he says, his accent thicker than peanut butter because of his lustiness.

THICKER THAN PEANUT BUTTER? IN THE MIDDLE OF A SEX SCENE? ! That wins the award for the most random comparison in a S/C fic (with smut) ever.

Fern Rose

Yum.

(and by the way, the Russian accent was really good!)

Thanks for writing.

Ah! That was one of the sexiest stories ever :D

So cute I can't stand it!

Great story!

It was great!

I thought the Russian was great by the way!

:)

Well, I'll say you're braver than I am - I've never quite worked up the nerve to do M-rated stuff - but you've done a nice job with this.

The premise of the story itself is quite good, and I can easily imagine Pavel & Hikaru getting into it because Hikaru bottles things up, etc. I liked the resolution - and the sex was definitely interesting.

A tiny thing - which I only mention because someone once did the same for me and I appreciated it - is a bit of verb tense stuff. During the sex scene, you go back & forth between past and present tense - which isn't a big deal at all, but the inconsistency is just a little distracting.

Really enjoyed this piece a LOT, and look forward to reading more of your work!