|Reviews for Backache|
| Guest 11/28/12 . chapter 1
| adelineadrenaline 7/4/11 . chapter 1
| Fernsfairie 7/29/10 . chapter 1
"Iz my turn," he says, his accent thicker than peanut butter because of his lustiness.
THICKER THAN PEANUT BUTTER? IN THE MIDDLE OF A SEX SCENE? ! That wins the award for the most random comparison in a S/C fic (with smut) ever.
| Yukimura Hina 5/21/10 . chapter 1
(and by the way, the Russian accent was really good!)
Thanks for writing.
| januaryfreeze92 3/14/10 . chapter 1
Ah! That was one of the sexiest stories ever :D
| superhappyfunshine 2/13/10 . chapter 1
So cute I can't stand it!
| rawrr.imma.dinosaur 2/1/10 . chapter 1
It was great!
I thought the Russian was great by the way!
| Lyricoloratura 1/29/10 . chapter 1
Well, I'll say you're braver than I am - I've never quite worked up the nerve to do M-rated stuff - but you've done a nice job with this.
The premise of the story itself is quite good, and I can easily imagine Pavel & Hikaru getting into it because Hikaru bottles things up, etc. I liked the resolution - and the sex was definitely interesting.
A tiny thing - which I only mention because someone once did the same for me and I appreciated it - is a bit of verb tense stuff. During the sex scene, you go back & forth between past and present tense - which isn't a big deal at all, but the inconsistency is just a little distracting.
Really enjoyed this piece a LOT, and look forward to reading more of your work!