this is very good! i hope u continue it!

loved these pieces and hope to read more

I can't believe it took me so long to get around to this. Anyway, I love this little glimpse at younger!Tina. I particularly like the snippets of conversation we see between Tina and her mother. It's something you pull into other stories as well, which makes it easy to see the bigger picture of how she gets along with her mother. Thanks for sharing 3

Just now getting to my review, bb. Sorry. :(

Anyway!

This is lovely and wonderful. I love it. Perfectly in-character and just excellent.

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hehe I really like this; you showed exactly where her 'dark side' could have come from. I like the broken arm bit, maybe it's a way for her to relate to Artie a bit?

Anyway, happy belated birthday and congrats on graduating from law school! :D yay!

Tina totally would love Poe! :) Welcome back and good luck with your interview. Oh and it's a day late, but happy birthday!

-Artie

"The nightmares that night were totally worth it."

HAHAHA! You make me laugh!

I can't wait for more! Update soon!

aww I REALLY like the way you portrayed Tina's parents! this is how I wanna think of them now instead of the usual evil abusive people that others normally write them as

I'm not sure how I missed Ch 1 of this story. I'm always on the lookout for new Artina. I like your take on the Cohen-Chang family. They are often written as absent or uncaring (although totally valid POVs.)

Congratulations on your graduation! Hope your job search goes well and you can dive back into this story.

awesome tina backstory! are you planing to write more?

Maggie! You finally posted it! And I'm SO happy to see it!

You already know my thoughts on this story, but I'll say it again, LOVE the story! I think it's an amazing premise and you're an amazing writer and I can't wait to see more!

Also, this is slightly shorter than usual, since it's being written on my phone! Haha. Hope everything is going well and you're doing ok :)

Em

I had a hard time with this line - "The idea of getting up in front of an entire classroom of people who really had no interest whatsoever in what you were saying was not my idea of a pleasant way to spend time"

At first I read it as if she's upset that people aren't listening to her. They usually try to quell anxiety by saying no one cares about what you're saying, so why be nervous about it if no one's listening. If there were commas for the phrase "who really had no interest whatsoever in what you were saying" then that would take the emphasis away from them not caring. And that her real fear lies in just being in front of people regardless if they're listening or not.

I like how you brought up the whole Asians looking the same thing especially because they're in Ohio and in the 6th grade. Well, I don't really know the census information for Ohio, but 6th graders are immature.

I like your take on her parents being supportive. She's not lashing out at them. And I'm glad you've given her another confidant pre-Artie in her grandmother. You've also written her as a believable eleven year old.

I really enjoyed reading this, and I like the insight you have about Tina's family life, history, and personality. It all sort of merges together into a series of events that lead us to Glee!time Tina. I love your writing style too; it flows quickly while covering a lot of little pieces of information. Lovely job and thank you for sharing :D

I thought Tina's stutter sounded pretty phony anyway. Doesn't take a speech therapist to know that. Mainly, I think it was the way she often stuttered in the middle of words or utterances instead of the beginning, which is what you would expect. (By the way, I'm an SLP, or speech therapist, so you've struck my fancy with this!) I disliked Tina's teacher for assuming she was Japanese (dumb teacher) and her classmate for that all Asians look alike comment! How rude! Anyway, nice job with this.

Tina's dad the science fiction writer ftw! I like how kind her parents and grandma are. Just because your parents don't understand you doesn't mean they're orgres, right?