I enjoyed the additional scene. The narration paints the scene clearly for me without overwhelming the dialogue and the dialogue itself is believably suited to the characters. It struck me as a little odd that Peter calls Olivia "Liv" near the end (I don't remember him doing it in the show, either) and then "Agent Dunham" in the next sentence (which I understand was a quote from Walter).

Hey fa,

Welcome to the Fringe fandom. :)

I thought this was very well-written.

Like Peter's tone at the bar.

Love that Liv found him. Love that she had to have a double scotch to get her barriers down enough to touch him.

Love how you worked Walter's words into this.

Does give us cohesiveness in the episode.

Would you consider writing a Bolivia Valentine's fic? I would love that too!

I also wondered why Peter was so wet.

I especially liked the way he kept remembering his earlier conversation with Walter, about how Olivia is exactly what he needed, because in that instance, she was.

I would quite like to read more fringe stuff from you

Ah, I like this filler. This would have worked on the show, definitely! Welcome back.

Ah,m this is lovely! Very nice to see the missing scene. You did a great job, and you write so well :)

I do like how you worked this into episode canon, and how you interspersed the lines from Walter in bold.

I know Peter is feeling very melodramatic as your scene opens, but this line

but rather it was to cloak those despairing in their own world of guilt and troubles.

is so over the top, awkward, and clunky. You appear to have the talent to be either more subtle or more skillful.

I did love the rhythm of the next few lines-the structure and staccato rhythm of the short sentences, each in its own paragraph. The lines and their content really give us a sense of Peter's mood in a much more "character-insightful" way (I put that awkward phrase in quotes because I'm not sure how else to say it).

...used discarded, Peter felt a presence fill the empty stool by his side.

He prayed it wasn’t another lonesome soul looking for companionship.

He had had enough offers for the night.

I'd LOVE to see more 'Fringe' work form you. I really like how you write Peter and how he feels about his father and Olivia.

This is a perfect little missing scene you got here. I love how you tied in Walter's opinion of Olivia and Peter's relationship. Very much in character; this is how that ep should have ended!