 Erin 3/1/07 . chapter 1 Well, I didn't like it. But I curse the day haiku was born, so that was predictable. For all that, if you try to ignore the lack of punctuation, grammar and rhyme, it's quite good. The problem with the poetry form, in my mind (besides the lack of, &c.,) is its brevity. You seem to have overcome the difficulty of expressing an emotion so Laconically. Bravo. |