It's really good, you have an ear for the author's writing style, which is admirable in fanfiction. Please, you really should continue writing fanfics like this, they really are excellent.

All of the charachters have very distinct voices in this series, and you captured them all excellently, especially Miss Jacky Faber's. Wonerful job!

Keep on Writing! ;D

Wow! You did a great job of imitating L. 's style! The story is a nice little interlude as well!

lol good job! :)

write more please!

Funny, if a bit short, could be a cool full fledged fanfic if you wanted to.

That was funny!