That was a weird scene in the film. Keep writing, you've captured it perfectly

Very smartly done. And very much in sync. Nice shot.

should have continued up to the restaurant and asking for water

Great job on this fanfic! I never read any story that captured how Beatrix escaped from burial alive, and this is a real treat. I liked reading her thoughts, as well as the way you describe her getting herself out. Truly one of the best moments of the movie. When you described how she was 6 feet (or more like 4 feet away) from freedom and that it was wood and dirt keeping her down...it really made you think about her situation differently. Also like the list of choices. Very good work!