This is one I will read again and again. Good job! Great twists!

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that was so strange. I mean it was good but a couple of times i had to backtrack and say "wat the fuck did i just read" and read it again before it clickesd. i love that about a story, makes u think. it was kinda sad wat happened to Alice though but overall it was awesome.

I read this review and i agree with it completely.

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TwilightQueen13

2010-03-26 . chapter 3

This is the worst piece of fucking shit I have ever read. I wish I had not wasted my time with your shitty writing. You obviously cannot spell, and your grammar is atrocious.

For one thing, Edward is too much of a gentleman and therefore too polite to talk to Bella like he did, and after I read this I wanted to kill myself; I was so fucking depressed.

Let's see...You cannot spell, you cannot use correct grammar, and you need to work on improving your vocabulary. How many fucking times are you going to say "cum"? There are plenty of other words you can use with either the exact same or a similar meaning.

You have no fucking talent whatsoever for writing.

My advice: Stop writing.

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Personally i think it's a little harsh.

But i read your story before this and it was just as bad.

Your ideas are fantastic which is why i wanted to read this.

Your writing skills not so much.

I don't think you should stop writing...Just improve on it.

Your ideas are really good though. [ Im going to read one of your newer stories to see the difference and because the ideas are good. ]

You have a lot you need to improve on. Your spelling, grammar and wording.

Maybe consider getting a beta?

[ If you'd like me to look over your stories before you post them I'd be happy to. ]

Interesting changes you've made to teh story here. I like how it is Jacob that caused Bella to die and be changed. And it's interesting that the little tyke is a boy. Hopefully Jacob doesn't imprint on him! Thanks for the chapter.

awesome story loved bellas dreams were a they got their happy ending.

loved it thanks for sharing this with us...

I loved it and thank you for sharing this with us...

Loved it thanks for sharing with us...

He is a pervert and I want one of my own you think she will share...

Wow she needs a vibrator thanks for sharing this...

Loved it very much thanks for sharing this with us...

I don't know how I missed this story but I did and I am stuck in this bed for another month So here I go...

Awwwee...it's over, fini.

I kinda wanted to see Charlie with his grandson, any outtakes there?

jansails/jan2

NO I haven't read it on Twics, but I WILL NOW.

I loved this short sweet tale, esp the Sexomnia, hey, if it weren't for you and this story, I'd never know the name of my fave disease. I will go to TwiCon this year, hopeful to sleepwalk at the hotel and nail a vamp..after all, fang bangers ROCK..lmao. I DID have 3 fan encounters last March at TwiCon, smoked with Gil B'ham, in the Gardent Charlie Bewley (that was funny), kissed Pfacinelli on his neck, swear! He was awesome, lucky Jenny Garth...cute what Edward wanted for their anniversay...just like a man..xx

Congratulations on finishing your story. :)