! I JUST READ THIS WHOLE THING AHHH AND I JUST WANT IT TO GO AWAY!

that was cute and lolness

... wut.

No, seriously; not to be mean but... what? Why the out-of-nowhere sex scene? I mean, couldn't the story function without anal sex? Now, don't get me wrong; I'm not some sort of prude who can't handle pornographic material - I myself was watching porn by the time I was eleven (hey, you try growing up with three older brothers and retaining your innocence! D:) - but anal sex annoys me. Mainly because it's hard to pull of correctly, and most who write anal sex has never actually *had* any.

Because it *hurts*. It hurts like hell, so most women (hell, most gay men) don't consent to it. It's also twice as dangerous as vaginal sex (though naturally Reggie does not have a vagina; this is not specific to this story but just to anal scenes in general), due to how easily things get torn up there. In other words, Reggie wouldn't be begging for more after one thrust - a human's arse is not designed for having things shoved up it, especially not gentalia.

Other than that, I won't be too hard on you - you've got decent grammar and remarkably good spelling compared to most slashwriters. Really, my only issue is with the anal scenes - arse-sex is painful and not very pleasurable the first time. It gets better, of course, but it's like a virginal woman having her hymen torn - painful (or at least in my case it was ).

Have a nice day/morning/evening/time of day you're reading this. :)

Ah...I love learning my ABCs. XD

Wait ta go! :D...*thats drool. XD*

hehe, that was hot and hilarious :)

keep writing

Mihai

Oh God that was extremely hot.

You out did yourself this time.

This was simply amazing.

I loved everything about it.

The lemon was superb.

You did a really good job on it.

Thanks for adding more

Olderbrothershipping fics to the site! XD

This shipping needs more loving! lol

Amber