So sad. I can't quite tell if she goes with him too or not? But sad to see Sarah like that. You write beautifully though. -Clare

This story sounds awesome. The thing is, I don't get it. :S

Wow...this writing was great. I felt a terrible pang in my heart when he answered with a harsh question, "does it have to be?" My heart sank! Anyway, great job. Beautiful string of words everywhere. Wonderful imagery. I applaud you.

confusing... but ok, i could accept that...

This so cool! I love it! Will Sarah fall for Jareth and asked to be taken away too? I hope so!

*sighs* Okay, obviously it's too late because I don't understand the ending. Oh, the style is flawless, and the choice of words makes me jealous. There's a dream-quality to this that I certainly appreciate and admire. But the cold realitly is: I don't get it. Can't make sense of Jareth's last words. I think I'll board the 'Who did he take?' train, because I can't make my mind ()

That was neat..

I liked it.. and the ending kind of made me wonder.. as in..

did he take her or the kid?

Nice work.

Loved the way you wrote this. It was innovative and intelligent, and very, very eloquent. You're incredible.

I think that this is probably the best story (or beggining of a story) I've seen on here. Of course I'm an angst lover, so I loved the fact that you didn't do the "Sarah realizes her mistake and Jareth comes and proclaims undying love" cliche. I think you're one of the few who captured his personality.

Did she return to the labryrinth with Jareth, or did she stay where she was?

Wow, amazing, incredible, well done, bravo, You cast my work into the depths of shame...

Thank you for writing this. It's beautiful. Mayhaps you should consider adding more...?

meh! that's dark, but good,... and sad.

It's not the end right? please continue!

later i'm outtie _

O.O Ooooh. That WAS dark! But I could see that happening.

I'm hoping this isn't a one-shot. You *have* to add more to this! I must have more!

- Ivy