I love this story and the series of stories you've created. Looking forward to more!

fantastic story...

i like the idea of there being another kind of vampires...

magan is a really great character and i like how she interacts with eric...

i would really like to see all the ancients together and erics reaction when he is confronted with all of them...

also the prospect of seeing eric jewing bubble gum is quite funny...

maybe you'll continue this story (that would be really great)

Thank you for sharing this story with us

Lady SiriusCrowBlack

I enjoyed the story. I wish it hadn't ended as it did, but I understand. I have all but stopped the story I am writing as well. It is very good.

To Shana2004

News flash - authors on this site write more for themselves, not for the readers. If you want to write criticism, be constructive - not personal. You also might like to edit for spelling and grammar too.

And your little valkirie game has nothing to do with real Norse mythology; it's just another Japanese ripoff that shows a lack of imagination.

Try writting your own work if you don't like what is posted. Oh wait, I forgot, based on reading your profile you just read - you don't write.

Lastly, if you don't like what I write - don't read it; and don't bother going throught the other stories doing what you did on this one, it's just rude.

No, I didn't like this. I'm not into that porn orgy stuff. There's no love in this, just a porn story right before the I so-called loved him and was the character ain't no way I would have him be some hoe. Much less do such sleazy act.

Ugh, hmm based on Maga's action she's a total hoe. Sorry she looks like that on my eyes. Although this was a great chapter

Oh wow this is really nice, an amazing lovemaking scene. Not like some others where they rush it, and it's done out of love.

ooohh this is so intriguing

Ahh amazing.

cOOL! hmm there's this game called Valkyrie Profile and the Valkyrie Sylmeria uses the warriors souls(she calls 'em Einherjar) until they want to be sent back to Valhalla.(well theres more to it thn that but its pretty complex to xplain _)

to mello137

You don't have a way for me to write a PM to you so I am writing to you this way. I haven't stopped writing this story - I've just been highjacked by other muses - see my profile for other stories.

Actually, I am forcing myself to finish this story - there are probibly going to be 3, maybe 4, chapters to finish it. One of the authors, mavrosol, inspired me to keep going and the next chapter is going to be dedicated to her. If you like my stories, you should look her stories up - they are GREAT!

Just read your story and I found it very interesting. Loved that you tackled Magan fortify her blood, it makes sense. Great story, sorry to see you've stopped writing it. I have a very hard time seeing Erik spelled with a c, so thanks for that.

Nice but is Megan/Magan 26 or what?I'm confused!

Heh, Eric and bubblegum, that ought to be amusing ;) UPDATE! please

Started this story a 12 or so it's now 1:30or so now I only hope you put a new part up I love how Eric met his match in her. Lol.