Woo hoo more story! I'm glad you haven't given up on this one. The quality of it has markedly improved since your last chapter, I must say (not that it was bad before). Yay for Toph! She will never cease being awesome. Although when you described her as seeing things, I assume you meant with her feet. But that's probably the only thing I could point out. Hope to see more from this one!

Cheers,

RAH

"He bawled his fist's as he thought about that day."

You seem to have a little trouble with homophones (words that are spelled differently but sound the same.)

"Bawl" means to cry loudly without restraint. You're needing to use "balled," as in, "curl into a ball."

Also, "fist's" is incorrect. An apostrophe designates a possessive, not a plural of a noun- "He balled one of his hands so hard that his fist's skin turned white." Plural would be "fists." "He balled his fists as he thought about that day." You make the mistake with the apostrophe in a couple of other places, too.

"Rode" is the past tense of "ride." "Road" is the thing you drive a car on (in modern times, anyway). "He rode the komodorhino down the ravaged road."

"Raised" is the past tense of "raise." "Raze" means to pillage and burn. "He raised the flag with the Fire insignia high above the razed village."

Why is Zuko bad now? If it's 5 yrs after he became Firelord, how did he change so fast? Just wondering...

Wow, what an amazing take on Avatar. I enjoyed it, despite it's darkness. Please keep going.

This is a very good fanfic, I can't believe there have been so few reviews! When I read the warning about character death I was afraid that you had killed off Aang or Katara. It was very graphic and painful to read Suki's death, but as long as Aang and Katara are together and alive I will keep reading.

Although this is good, I think you should work on A Dragon's Breath, as it is more interesting.

Your loyal reader, Vlad Taltos

Awesome chapter.

Awesome chapter.

I just love your dark storys.

Awesome chapter.

Stalingrad! And the 600 day siege, Napoleon's retreat from Moscow, Iroh has had a rough time of it. Glad to see that he is still around.

Fire ships in Chameleon bay, hey it worked for Drake.

More Sokka can’t wait.

I alaways like dark fiction storys.

Well what can I say, Sokka is my favorite character in the series and of all the Sokkas my favorite is the angst driven “kiss of death” Sokka who loses everyone he loves and goes all cold and depressed, so of course you had me all the way with this chapter (that has to be one of the longest run on sentences in review history).

Minor quibble; Sokka hanging off of the cliff for twenty minutes seemed like a long, long time while Suki made her last stand.

Likes; Suki’s last stand, it was nice that you gave her that power and authority.

The descriptions of the city and soldiers in the rain.

The cadre of watchers under Sokka’s command.

That Yue kept saving him, and especially that she apologized for continuing his torment.

Interested to see where Aang and Katara are, and to hear their stories.

Can’t wait for the next twelve to eighteen chapters.

Awesome chapter.

This is an interesting premise for your story, I want to see were you go with it. I hope that you will begin to introduce the other characters soon.

Just a couple of quibbles, Aang is spelled with the double A not the double n, and Katara only has one R, unless that is part of the AU of the story, if it is sorry.

I will be anxious to see where you go with this.

Am starting to like this story and write more.