This looks really, really good! I can't wait for you to write more!

Interesting start! Please update soon! )

*Laughs very loudly and rolls on floor*

This is going to very interesting...

cool chapter :)

A girl! That is so percy's luck! XD

This is a really cool idea and looks like it is going to be an awesome story!

there were a few grammer mistakes, but I couldn't really care less. (I mean, even the real books still have mistakes and typos)

Again, great start and I look forward to read the rest of the story as it's put up. So please, UPDATE!

I think this story is very interesting! I love the idea that you have with the rebirth and Kronos and all that jazz. It's really original, and terribly interesting. Is Luke going to be riencarnated too, or is he just going to be Hades helper? What about everyone else? I can't wait to have my questions answered in this story So excited

I don't really know what Theia 47's problem is, because sometimes it is best to explain things like flashbacks because some people do not know. I also think that the rebirth thing could be explained a tad more, but that's what other chapters in the story are for, yeah? But if you ever decide that you want a beta I'm totally open. Need more to do with my life than sitting in front of a comp reading fanfics all day.

I'm really excited to see where this story will go! (Do you have any pairings decided for this story yet?)

WOW

nice continue

I think you did a pretty good job keep writing! Don't even give those flamers a second thought except you might need a Beta.

Flashback

"Annabeth did save him," I said. "Luke died a hero. He sacrificed himself to kill Kronos."

"I appreciate your words, Percy. But Kronos isn't dead. You can't kill a Titan."

"Then-"

"I don't know". Hermes grumbled." None of us do. Blown to dust. Scattered to the wind. With luck, he's spread so thin that he'll never be able to form a consciousness again, much less a body. But don't mistake him for dead, Percy.

End of Flashback

I have a problem with this. The readers, despite proof that is the PJO fandom, are not in fact morons and we can guess what is and what is not a flashback.

You have several grammar mistakes, like this:

["Better than you, I daresay." I said.]

It should be ["Better than you, I daresay," I said.]

And, wait, lolwhut? Did Percy agree to becoming a god or something? Because if he were two hundred years old, then he'd be dead. Long, long dead. So yeah, you need to explain that.

Get a beta. ASAP.

Tanks much.

*Theia 47