|Reviews for The Young Ones : Karma|
| Moonphase 4/20/10 . chapter 3
This is an interesting idea. I'd like some of these guys to be taught a lesson, as they were so mean to each other. This could show some character development as well, which is cool. You have their characteristics down very well.
My criticisms are thus: often the grammar and spelling is poor (grammar being more of an issue.) The problem is that it makes a good story hard to read, and more than once I became frustrated. Also, the layout is odd; sometimes two or more lines of speech are typed on the same line. Also, by the end of the chapters, the writing suddenly goes into the centre.