This is sooo beautiful...

Oh my God! What an amazing yuri. I have never read a love scene, done so innocently. Your writing was...remarkable! Impressive diction as well! It's great to see a yuri that doesn't turn the involved into sluts. THIS is how a yuri SHOULD be written! Amazing job.

. Yes! You nabbed these two with the 'simple grace' in your writing. It was sophisticated yet warm and intimate enough that it gave off a heated vibe. (Fire Water ((or ice)) boiled-over passion.) You've got it down, great job!

I am not a fan of this pairing, usually, but I am so glad I gave this story a shot. You made me want to be a fan of these two, as long as it's done right. And you hit the nail right on the head.

nice, yeah this pairing is great when done correctly :) and you hit the spot