Beautiful...I think you truly captured the feeling here. I almost couldn't read it because the feelings being conveyed were so strong. But I did read it and I'm glad I did. It was just amazingly beautiful. A masterpiece. Truly, amazing.

That brought tears to my eyes.

Lovely.

Thank you.

I am speechless. Breathless. That was amazing!

Well, that was very touching. Nice work!

Aww, this made me cry, it's so sweet. I love the way you wrote his feelings. I love the way you expressed his emotions and character. In fact, I loved all of it. Keep writing stuff like this, please! You're exceptional!

This story is incredible. I think you wrote Edmund very well. This is very deep and doesn't really talk a out just Ed, but all of us as well. I LOVE stories that have Aslan comforting Edmund. This is one of the best ones I've read so far because Aslan was so beautifully and obviously Jesus that the overall effect was touching and lovely. Your story had an underlying truth running through it, that's what makes it so moving, in my opinion anyway...ok I'm gonna shutup now...

This was written by my fun-loving, bouncy silly Monkey? Wow, I must make an effort to trace down more of your work. It's beautifully written (although it could be trimmed a wee bit...I was tempted to skim over parts to get to the turning point), and a story EVERY true follower of Christ can relate to to some degree. Like Emperor's Child, I too was confused by the setting...I'm assuming it's after they've all come back through the wardrobe, but as to where? I couldn't quite figure it out, and that actually distracted me from enjoying this as much as I wanted to.

But those are just nit-picks...overall, this is a powerful and very mature piece of writing, my friend! Thank you for blessing us with it! *Hugs* :-)

"Slithering shadows"... I love that image.

This is kind of intense, but not out of place. Have you ever read "A Little Princess"? I find myself thinking of the first night Sara knew her papa was dead.

Wow.

I-wow.

This isn't just Edmund. It's all of us. I mean, maybe we haven't all felt this way, but in a way, we should, because Jesus did the same thing for us, for me, for basically the same reason. The grief, the regret, I deserve to experience that too, and worse. There have been times when I have hated myself for what I am, and called myself a disaster. But then, He reminds me that I am His beautiful disaster, and that makes all the difference. His very presence comforts me, much like it did with Edmund.

On a more critical note, I am confused about the setting for this story, especially the time. Edmund keeps thinking "after all this time," and things like that, and it is never clarified: how much time has it been? Also, how does he know the words the Witch used that night?

I am very impressed with this fic, and very moved by it, and I can't wait for more. Please keep writing!

Fiddlesticks. You got your story finished before I could get mine anywhere near completed. And, I must say, you have out-done yourself again.

I don't think there is anything you could have done to make it any better. ("All I Can Say" has officially been added to my Favorites List!) My favorite line is still -"Lion’s alive"- As I mentioned before, the parallel there is stunningly beautiful and so simple for such a short line.

"There was a Lion’s paw print in the dust." - He's been here. He knows. He'll help you through. (Reminds me a bit of Shasta when he rides over the Pass into Narnia too.)

By the Lion's grace,

Aravir

p.s. I'm so so so sorry I didn't get back to you when you first showed me the story. :(

That was amazing. So, so beautiful. I love that Aslan just was there for a second, yet it made such a difference for Ed. "You're my beautiful disaster" was such an awesome line, so true. Loved it!

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XD You did an excellent job fixing everything up, Monkey. Good use of /'s to keep thoughts and song separate.

As usual, I love Ed and his intense ability to give readers an angst-turned-hopeful scene, and your equally AMAZING ability to write it.

Great job, Monkey!

As Always,

-Tonzura123