I lOve yuki. She was my fav character the moment I saw her, no joke. The way you wrote her POV was awesome.

There must be an error. I was never meant to be cute.

Hahaha _ funny

hello the way you wrote yuki was amazing. she is my fav charator. i love how she secretly wannts it mmmmm

I love how Haruhi is kind and gentle here, they're having sex for the first time so it's understandable.

LMAO, female ejaculation. Yuki's scientific approach fit perfectly. Great femslash.

Well, well, soldier...

Ok, so I'm kinda new in this section, give the fact I've NEVAR watched TMoHS in my LIFE. All I know 'bout it is from anime reviews on different websites. LOL

But still! An AW3SOME! fic is an AW3SOME! fic, and a reviewe is a review. LMAO

So!

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This was AW3SOME!

ROFL at Yuki's uber scientific approach to everything. ROFL I'll admit I did a double take when I read the scientific term for "female ejaculation". I was like...O.o XD Kudos for that.

Oh yeah, and O at Haruhi making Yuki confused. O LOEV works in mysterious ways! ;D

So, Helluva job here, marine!

Semper-Fi! Carry on!

Lol that was a great read! I swear I was having an orgasm just reading O.O

SO HOT LESBIAN SEX!

kekeke.

I'm not that familiar with TMoHS, but I liked it, so that's all that counts! :D lol

I don't know, am I actually supposed to give constructive criticism here? lmao Well, I just read your tweet, so I will.

Um, the random part about female ejaculation and how you put in the actual name for discharge really cracked me up, I don't know if that was the intention. lol Otherwise, obviously you weren't going to get hot and sweaty sex with Yuki, so I think you did a good job of making it erotic without like, really going over the top. And I agree with the one other person that Haruhi would be tender in these situation, especially since she liked Yuki. And, albeit with limited knowledge, I thought you did Yuki's perspective really well, because love is the one emotion that makes even unemotional people...emotional! :D

So yes, I very much liked it. I would like to read more fic from you, smut or no. :D

And I'll work my way through the K-ON one too, just not tonight. :)

So there you go.

Very nicely written, and I find Haruhi's gentleness refreshing and surprisingly in character. Yuki as well! Ah, Yuki...Wonderfulness...

This fic is justice. Thank you for being awesome and making my day. ;D

Road

I dunno. Well written, but Haruhi seems unusually gentle, and I guess I'm just naturally averse to first person narration by Yuki.

Overall, very good.