I just reread this story, and I have to say, it's pretty good. I'm intrigued in finding out how this 'Helper' is. I'm looking forward to seeing what more you have for us.

You've swapped 'your' and 'you're', but otherwise, it's pretty decent. Just be careful. "Your" is possessive, and "you're" is a contraction for "you are".

I will support you all the way! Keep up the good work!