This is so well-written and exciting - please update whenever you get a chance. Your characterizations are so, so spot-on.

very interesting!

I'm in love with this story ;)

It's really refreshing to read a good Sirius/Lily friendship fic.

The characters are well written, I feel that sometimes people go overboard and make Sirius hyperactive (and occasionally a bit of an idiot) or have Lily screaming every second sentence. But you've made them charming and witty and believable.

Please update soon

I really love fics that show the growing friendship between Lily and Sirius, and this is a particularly good one. I look forward to seeing how their relationship develops, and also how Sirius is forgiven by the Marauders.

This story is amazing! I can't wait until you update!

I've just read all of your story so far and it's amazing. I love how Lily and Sirius have become friends. I also like how you've worked in the relationship of the Marauders and how their friendship isn't the same but it's changing. I'd love to read more of this story if you're planning on continuing, which I hope you are.

I stayed up far later than I should have last night reading this story, and it was the first thing I thought of when I woke up. Please update soon! You’re an amazing writer. I love how you’re telling the story essentially from Lily’s point of view, complete with observations, insecurities, musings, lies, and the hopes that occur in the moment. You have an excellent attention to detail, from the fact that Lily is slightly jealous of Fee yet feels pity for her, to Sirius’ subtle shifts in mood and behavior as he tries to cope with his exile.

Normally, I lose patience with fanfictions that have so much description between dialogue, particularly description of every little shift of weight, but your story is an exception, for every description not only adds depth or understanding to the story, but also enhances my imagining of the scene. It’s a perfect balance, as is the amount of detail paid to Lily’s ruined friendship with Severus and her new friendship with Sirius – two boys who I’ve always seen as parallels anyway. One born with everything, one with nothing, both abused and cast out to make it on their own, both forced into events beyond their control because of their loyalties… I could go on, but I’ll spare you.

Suffice it to say, you have a wonderful future ahead of you as a writer. I really do hope you finish this story and while I’m waiting, I’ll read your other Sirius fics! Thank so much for writing and sharing!

Darling! I will keep repeating myself until the very end; I am in love with this fic. I feel so very sorry for Sirius and I can't wait until him and Lily to get closer. It's so unusual to see someone write about Sirius so alienated and down on his luck, especially in the school setting. The dynamic between all the characters' relationship with each other is addicting. I'm sorry I didn't review earlier; it wasn't on purpose! I do hope you're still working on this. :)

Love it, can't wait for more.

This is a very good and interesting story!

Keep it up:)

“"Well yeah," Gladys says, snorting faintly. "It's not as if he goes pulling girls into closets every day."

"Yes, it is usually the other way around," Ann says in a murmur.”

Again another really nuanced, canonical Sirius characterisation. I’ve definitely always seen him as a bit of a ladies’ man, but not one that particularly cares enough to actively chase girls; other stuff – i.e. his friends – is definitely more important to him. But I did think that in the type of lonely situation he is currently in, that his actions with Felicia are totally in character, and a good demonstration of his emotionational immaturity. What he was talking about to her before was a nice view of where his mind really was too. And again loving the thought you’ve put into the wizarding names!

“He clears his throat and looks back around the bend, clearly expecting his friends to be waiting for him as he and James had slowed down for Remus, but James and Remus have continued trotting on, oblivious to the loss of their shadow. Peter's face falls.”

That really, really sums up Peter and is such a clever little character insight – that you are especially good at!

Also I enjoyed Lily’s situation within the students and ger relationships with them – it’s a completely unique way of writing her, and I think, more canon given her friendship with Snape and the apparent lack of female members of her age in the Order.

Nooooo you can’t leave it there! I’m invested! Damn. Really good characterisations again, although it did take me some time to get used to the present tense narration, and I’m still not entirely convinced that it’s the best way to tell a story – but that’s just my opinion. I particularly liked that your interpretation of Evan Rosier was realistic and multi-dimensional. Reeeeally hope you update soon – I’m a bit desperate to find out what happens next!

Ahhhh, now I'm really really curious to find out what's going to happen. Your use of Tarot cards and tying it into the character's back stories was really creative. I also like how you don't have Marlene and Lily as friends, since that's different from most stories.

"That may have come out somewhat more interestingly than it was meant to.

Hahahahahaha. I was literally laughing out loud at this line. This line was good too: "James seems to realize at this point that Sirius is not, in fact, in his skivvies, but throws down his hands expansively as if indicating again they know what he means."

The conversation between Sirius and Lily seemed really natural yet interesting to read, and the ending of this chapter with McGonagall was sweet also.