Amazing story there, MAH BOI

Loved the ending. Look forward to reading more of your stories.

This is really good for your first fanfiction.

"No one's going to take my sempai away from me!"

Keitaro and Naru stared. Kitsune backed away.

"Um, Shinobu, put the sword down honey -"

Best. Bit. EVER..

You caught what many authors seemed to fail to : That even in the violence of Love Hina, there is gentleness and support. No one was dissed, and even Kei's treatment didn't seem out of line (any more out of line than usual).

I say this fanfic has great simple idea. Just one question: what's Tsuruko think when She heard/read about Motoko in newspaper?

come on please make it kei/mot ending PLEASE i have really enjoyed this story but leaving it to hang like that its sad so again PLEASE make it kei/mot ending

heh shame you ended it, but still a fun read while it lasted!

thanks for writing!

Poor Keitaro, lol. I hope you will give him a break (and I don't mean bone(s) XD) in the following chapters. Otherwise a very entertaining story.

I just had an intersting idea. What if in each match Motoko has she wears a different outfit like on CardCaptor Sakura.

While reading this I couldn't help but wishing there was some illustrations attached to this story! Seriously now, I like the dialogue, specially Kitsune's lines are hilarious. Keep it up.

Snicker... interesting chapter... nice fashion show... more Kei/Motoko time please :)

well just for once make Keitaro hit Naru its pissing me off all the time seeing him hit by her i think she deserves to travel to brazil while traveling all over ourope and atlantic

Dont remember if i have reviewd prev but story is great i just hope Keitaro and Motoko atleast end up together.

I hope Naru gets her head knocked off! She's starting to piss me off for some reason? I hate that pervert (Naru)!

Sorry just me ranting O_O

Whoa... You weren't kiddin' about the fanservice.

But great work anyway.

Now I think need to lie down...