I liked your prologue, it was a nice beginning.

A good set up for a follow up story. I like the exposition through the radio; great idea.

But man, you need to find the period button on the keyboard. Lay off on the comma bit and from some complete substances. Tighten up the mechanics and you have a great start.

This story is not very well written. First off the military never just assigns units as 'Insert Action, Number'. Please, delete this story. It is physically painful to read. Not trying to be mean it just makes you look bad as an author.