Haha, loving this so far. Can't wait for how you'll have the Grunt reaction, or Legion, hell. The whole damn thing should pitch up to be a blast!

Only question burning in my brain... Is WHO? Kelly, Tali, or Jack. Those three are the ones screaming at me as to be those whom Shep will go for. OR will he not go at all? Personally, Jack? HELL NO! Tali? Eh... She's alright, but I don't think its ideal..

Kelly thou? THAT I can see happening!

Haha, anyways, look forward to the next peice when ya get to it!

I really can't wait to see what you have planned for before/after loyalty missions . One image I always had but didn't see was Tali telling Shepard she was accused of treason, with Shepard answering "What the hell?" or something like that.

Liked the chapter, but I'm still unhappy about the length. Oh well, I'll simply hope you'll be inspired for future chapters.

I like this. Chapters could be a bit bigger in my opinion, but I do like what I see.

Can't wait to see what you have in mind next chapter.

...But considering how Tali is and how Jack is acting, meeting Ashley again won't go well, right? Oh well.

Tali for the win! :D

I didn't really notice anything that needed correcting; the dialogue seems to be in-character throughout and the personalities are all pretty much what I've come to expect from your take on the game. Nicely done, Abbot. :)

Interesting take on the time shepard spends when not fighting for his life on a mission, keep it up

No real complaints this time around, another solid chapter, though I do miss Garrus and Shepard's banter after he walks through the door in the game. ;)

One nitpick: "...but Garrus is a hard bastard." You changed tense from past to present when you used "is" instead of was.

Always glad to help one of my favorite authors, Abbot. ;)

It's up! It's got three chapters! I return to the fanfiction after many days and nights of irritating distractions to find a success story! (I feel you on "assignment time"...)

Looking forward to more - love that the uniform ordeal is going through. Also am particularly fond of "half naked, heavily tattooed..." to openly describe Jack. XD About time someone just comes out and says it.

Truthfully I did like Miranda in the game. Not at first (though looking at her certainly wasn't painful from the very beginning - just wish she had more than just one expression and a slightly reworked mouth and chin), but then with the progress of the story she shaped into someone likeable.

So, while I think you had Miranda out of character (she's not the type to explode when she's angry at Shep, but to calmly explain her frustration - well, at least not in my playthroughs), but you certainly had Jack in character.

While hoping you won't have Miranda as the literal Dragonlady, I still hope to read more soon.

I'm really enjoying these one-shots. I like the way you're nailing down the dialogue for each character. Mordin was hilarious.

Darn good to see some good Mass Effect writing, Abbott! Keep writing it and I'll keep reading it. Heck, maybe if I can stop PLAYING both games long enough I'll even take a shot at it myself. Who knows? Only thing that seemed out of character to me was Shepard saying "blech", but I'll let it slide this time. ;)

I was astounded in ME1 already why they had a ship into who they poured billions to make it stealthy, flying around painted like one of those tuner cars, all bright and glowy and attention-attracting. Normandy should be painted matte black, with no logos, or ones that could be instantly changed to a different one, like Pirate ships did with flags. Pretty stupid flying and walking around with your logo proudly displayed if you're trying to be some super-secret organization.

And why they had party members running around without armors and shields is beyond me. And why there was no Mako too, I loved those driving missions.

Btw., which pairing will you ship in this fic? Shep/Kelly? Would be nice if you did, this would be the first MShep/Kelly fic in existence.

pretty good

i really like the narration, and the premise of "hearing" what is going on in shepard's head. the only thing that might be a little confusing is who is saying what in the dialog. i had to go back and re-read those parts to discern whos saying what. but other than that i really like your story man! hope to hear more from you on this.