Awesome so far! Poor Eve! I love the hint in the note, you know how it's signed by Adam. It's a good way to figure out something has to do with Eve. Anyway I loved it and ca't wait for more. Update soon!

Yaay you updated! Noo poor eve! Woow. They just left a teenage girl Alone when they know a kid/girl knappers on the loose? Lol :) can't wait til u update again tho

Not bad-its a good story in the making. A little substancial background would be nice, you know? Like a little say in emotion, background, response, things like that, but you've got a good part of the technique down. I'm interesting in reading the next chapter.

A small tip from a one-shot writer who's trying to write a multi-chapter story: take you time, think through the storyline and come up with a plausible ending even if you're nowhere near the ending.

If I had thought of that before, I wouldn't be how many weeks behind my promised update...

please update

It's so cool. I like it so much. Up date soon okay? X3

I think u should continue it :)) and I hope u update soon-!

I think this is a pretty good start, but could use improvements. Until next time,

Mukuro Out