This was funny! The rating could be little higher for

the language.

Finally Finch gets to say what he wants..

Think of "The Finch That Stole Christmas."

"words that our censors won't allow us to share."

Excuse me mr/ms Snow Dome, this story had a good concept for the storyline except for the excessive use of cussing that you have used. The story would have been much more effective if you had subsituted the cussing for less harsh words making it a more enjoyable read for the public. So much for the pg13 rating that u hav listed it under. You also include several perverted comments. I am extremely Excuse me mr/ms Snow Dome, this story had a good concept for the storyline except for the excessive use of cussing that you have used. The story would have been much more effective if you had subsituted the cussing for less harsh words making it a more enjoyable read for the public. So much for the pg13 rating that u hav listed it under. You also include several perverted comments. I am extremely disapointed by the grammatical abilities that you possess as your Fan Fiction could have had alot of potential.

sweet.

-Bxx

I Love it! You're good! Try doing something in Maya's POV...

Aw...poor sweet baby! Come over here and have a cookie.
him: I don't wanna damn cookie!
me:Have a carrot!
him:I don't wanna damn carrot!
me:Poor baby! Let me give you a hug!
him: I don't wanna damn...what?
Just kidding...I don't think it's possible
unless I warp into an alternate universe or something...

I always thought Maya and Finch were THE coupling in that show. This fic was so good.

First of all, Dennis' characterization.. PERFECT! I could honestly just picture him saying those lines, making his expressions as he silently cursed "Fuck it" or something. You truely spoke in his voice. *applauds*

Then, Maya, also very in-character. This is THE Maya I know from the show.. Not some weird alternative universe-Maya.

This little story made me laugh and "aww" at the same time. Truely the best Finch/Maya-fic on this site that I've read so far. Brilliantly handled. *thumbs up*

Ohhh, poor Dennis. I know what it's like to have strong feelings for someone and not be able to tell that person how you feel. This is a very nice story, and you did a good job at keeping Dennis and Maya in character.

Awwwwwwww... so sad...

Hehe. Good story. I feel so sorry for dennis, only cuz he's an asshole in this...hehe

I think dennis has feelings for maya. They would make a cute couple in my opinion. Maybe the new writers will make them a couple? Time will tell. They might be a very popular couple if they were to hook up. I said might be, I think finch likes to confide in maya. I say put them together. Then let them get married. Maybe marry them on the final episode of just shoot me.

Write more! I really want to see Finch and Maya together (sounds weird, I know) But !

If you haven't figured it out I'm a huge just shoot me fan...

that was a great story. short, but great. why dontcha make sequel where maya actually notices him or something...heheh...props to the snow dome...

This is absolutely hilarious! You really have the quirkiness of the show down, and Dennis' motivations, and all the characters... heehee!

poor finch!*sniffle*he is a perv though..*sniffle*

I LOVED IT!