she has the same scar? exactly the same?

Other than the format the story's really good.

Please release another Akira. For me this to Selena Benilo.. Hehe. I like that. Gorgeous.

Akira,what did you mean when you said go ahead,bring the story.I have Orinoco Flow in my fics now.I have the lyrics to that and...Caribbean Blue!Some of it is in Celtic,which I LUV Orinoco Flow!

Whoah!What a great story!You gonna write more of this eh?OMG!

I'm sorry, but I can't read a story without format. It sounds lovely, but I can't keep track of where I am in the story when there are no line breaks.

The format was kinda confusing (In other words, I couldn't read it). But otherwise, pretty good story! :O)

Akira,I cant get on right now except now!My mother is being a damn !So Ill just review this and that other.I hate Algebra 1!

But this was really awesome!Go Akira,go Akira!

Wow! that was really good. Great work, i cant wait for the next part.

You really need to format. I couldn't get through this. Format and working on your tenses. Half of it was present tense, half of it was past. It confused me.