Very good, but Harry cries too much. Guys really commit cry that much or hug adults like a life preserver.

Never trust Bumbles.

Like canon, Bumbles has no interest in how Sirius was imperiused or whomdid it (Snivellous?).

Harry is WAY too trusting, still-someone there helped the DEs.

Why wasn't Harry portkeyed away to snake-man?

Very good story. A bit too much betrayal but of course that is the name of the story so it is expected. Thanks for sharing!

its animagus not animagy

wonderful story. Marauders Next Generation rules.

I can tell this story is one of your first ones you've written. There are many mistakes, such as you constantly say animagy when the real word is animagus or animagi. You also spell several spells wrong, don't capitalize the spells, punctuation is off, and so is grammar.

There are several issues with consistency. Harry just got his parents back and they know nothing about him. Yes, he has a right to be mad at them for what they said about his Parseltongue ability, but having Harry leave his parents behind after bringing them back to life seems so...unbelievably childish. Yeah he can be mad at them, even yell, but maybe instead of abandoning them, he could tell them about himself. Or at least you could have had Sirius and Remus to talk to them about Harry.

Now that I've finished my critique, I'll say what I liked about the story. I loved the guilt trip about the suicide pact. You could totally run with the guilt factor the Weasley family is more than likely having to "make up for" their betrayal of Ron. They had no reason to not believe him, and they betrayed him. Now they should feel as guilty as possible and maybe even have Ron not rub it in their faces but just act a little cold towards them but generally like hes trying to give them a second chance. That would make them feel even guiltier.

the whole plot of this story is really great. I love the whole, "Trio are running from the law" thing, and I think with a little (a lot) of editing it could be a great story as well.

I was a little worried about how the trio met the Muggle Professor, but you explained that fairly well. You also explained how they could have magical animagi forms when magical forms aren't ever heard of. It's the small things that need to be fixed up.

Overall, this story rates fairly low because of all the errors and mistakes made (and that one horribly OOC chapter) but the points is does get are for the interesting plot. I may have to go check out more Harry runs from the law stories after this. It may need a lot of fixing, but it's still going on my fav list.

5/10

Okay, there's the "Everything isn't perfect" scene I wanted! You must have had an off chapter.

So far the story has been really interesting. But the whole, "Well, it's good to see you both! Even though you've been dead for 14 years, answers can wait until after my breakfast." thing.

I hate it when Authors don't provide realistic reactions to things. If James and Lily had walked in on that room full of people the day after an attack on Hogwarts by 30 Death Eaters, everyone would have jumped up and attacked James and Lily. Attack first ask questions later. There is no way in entire world of Harry Potter you portrayed this realistically and that really dumbs down the whole story.

You should fix this part. Make Sirius and Remus react more...I don't know, like they don't just immediately believe it...at least for a little while. Same with the Staff and students. Only the trio knows how its done so they should have to explain right away. I know you were probably trying to draw out the tension, but the way you did it, made it so there was no tension. Life isn't all peachy this way, especially in Harry's world. This whole chapter was horribly OOC.

Sorry if this seems like a flame but I'm currently writing a story where James, Lily, and Sirius are alive after DH and my main Plot-point is that it's not all peachy keen as soon as they're back. it' really bothers me when Author's do half-assed jobs on their stories. Make it believable and you make it awesome!

Well, this certainly is an interesting fan fiction; but i must cease my reading for today. Probably tomorrow I'll continue, no, i'll continue forest of mystery. The day AFTER that ill read this one.

I anticipate a rise in the PLOT.

Looks liek there's gonna be some action

How old are the Trio?

That was SO sweet, like caramel paste with sugar on top.

I am happy, and thankful that you didnt make it take several chapters until they got back; i dunno if i could have waited that long.

REMINDER: UPDATE THAT FAN FIC: PUTTING LIFE IN UR OWN HANDS.

The phoenix necklace conceptis interesting, as well as the Avada K. theory.

OMG!

This is perfect!

Everything is perfect and happy and jovial and..

Too Perfect.

Hmm..