Very good but I couldn't keep the song and lyrics together sometimes...maybe it's just me.

Kawaii! Thank god it goes with the song, a lot of people would screw it up! But it's perfect, and the lyrics are beautiful! Bravo! Wonderful job!

sumimasen, um...

nice lyrics though they should belong to another song. Maybe you should incorperate a sunlit garden (in metaphor or tangible form) in your song? The lyrics in the theme song in utena was about the relationship between utena and anthy...um these lyrics kind of remind me of the famous movie scene but it doesn't seem to fit the song. In my poor opinion (since I suk at writing poems and stuff) maybe you should consider the events where this song was played in the series?

;_; Twas bee-yootiful. Although I'm not quite sure about the last stanza... what notes do those go with in the music- perhaps you could give a cue of some sort? But overall, I loved the lyrics. VERY well done. _