awesome

plz keep writing i want more it's a good story

im loving he story so far plzzzz keep on working on this awsome story.:)

please wite more i love this

this story is good :D i love it.

i can't wait to read the rest of it :D

XXX

Hi, great story. Please write more - don't worry about

your spelling it's cool like it is know.

I really like this story but I wish you could write this story faster...

pleeeaaasssseeeeeeeeeee write chapter 3 plz this story is really good i love it write more plzzzzzzzz

Can you PLEASE continue the story? because i can't wait to see what will happen next.

LUV IT!

I am sorry, but it's not very well done. One, grammar and punctuation is incorrect. You do not do things such as:

Lisa: Well, if I tell you, are you sure you won't tell anyone?

You must put it in the correct order:

"Well, if I tell you, are you sure you won't tell anyone?" Lisa inquired, narrowing her eyes at me.

I wish not to tell you this, but if you keep writing like this, you shall not be published. People want mature authors, and this writing proves that, unless you clean up your English skills, that you are not a mature author.

- Thunderbaby310