This is so well writen, such a powerful beginning

man i can't wait for etsuko to meet hatsumomo and get knocked down a few pegs

write on!

This is great! You should keep writing more! Really, really good! :)

Having read "Memoirs of a Geisha" I was able to grasp an understanding of how a Geisha would act, etc.

I can see that you really understand what Geisha want and how harshly they may be. I think you should write more as I enjoyed reading what you have written. I am not to good at review writing and yar. Very good.