love this story. loving the snake name as well! yeah, i have a pet snake, pretty dangerous, can kill with one bite. his names Derek! find it so funny xxxx

I've figured out the riddle! Here's my translation:

"In the chamber of the greatest founder..."

The Chamber of Secrets, built by Salazar Slytherin

"From the girl who cries forever..."

The entrance is in Moaning Myrtle's bathroom

"To the chamber where the king of snakes rests..."

The king of snakes is the Basilisk

"The stag and the flower will finally meet their end."

James and Lily will die

the twiwizard winnings were 1,000 galleons, not one million.

Hey, I love dangers in the past. I cant find the prequel to it. Could you please give me the link to it. Thanks

I think this is a very interesting story and seems very promising. I'm not sure if I like how you are portraying harry. Likely at 16 and just have vanquished voldemort he wouldn't put his arms around sirius neck in public and snuggle. You're kind of making him at like a very young child, or a little girl. Also changing his eyes would make him look less like lily but since james has hazel eyes it would do nothing to change their resemblance. Also I'm not sure if u changed any of sirius' features because otherwise I'm sure his younger self would know aswell as the other teachers. But beside those few notes I think you're doing a wonderful job and I can't wait to finish the story. :)

"'Ethan and I were walking through the wall on our way outside when a section of the hall opened and death eaters started to come in. We were taken by surprise and didn't have the time to warn anyone. We were very lucky nearly all teachers were near, close enough to hear the shouts when the attack started. We started to fight them and the other professors joined us. Finally, when Ryan came we seemed to have the upper hand, but then a basilisk came out. We didn't stand a chance, we were overwhelmed since no one seemed able to get near the snake to kill it. We were losing badly when...' He stopped suddenly and looked apologetically at Dumbledore. "I think it's better if someone else continues, I know what happened but I didn't see it myself." Dumbledore nodded in agreement and everyone in the room turned to Flitwick.'

you never said who was talking

Amazing story

I added your story to my new community. "10 reviews or more of the Harry Potter community."

I go by that name here, don't feel like logging in. I really like the story, but I don't know if I will keep reading, because time travel makes my brain hurt, unless you are saying that which exists cannot un-exist.

Oh wormy's very nice.

hi,

I do realise that you wrote this about 7 years ago and I'm sure your writing's changed since; so feel free to disregard this as it may no longer be relevant.

It is for this reason that I'm only going to comment on the use of language and not the plot or general style itself.

Just a few little things really - if you ever take another look at this you may want to revise some of the phrasing. I saw that you're Spanish and I'm very impressed with the english! The only clues I had that you aren't enlgish are the few cases where the phrasing isn't quite right.

for example:

in one of the previous chapters you said "he contemplated that it wouldn't be a good idea to go back to sleep"

Contemplated should be replaced with another verb or the entire sentence changed, contemplating isn't a process that decides anything - you can contemplate whether or not to go back to sleep but you can't contemplate that you should wake up

and in this chapter "My mother's sister married a man who hated everything and everyone that was different, out of normal, as they would say"

"out of normal" is wrong, you can say abnormal, not normal but not out of normal.

Just little things like that.

AWESOME! (i did read the whole story, i just went back to the beginning)

you know, whenever i think of them being crucified (kinda), i think of Silent Hill (the movie, not the game). god, that movie was fuckin creepy (sorry for the harsh languange, but i didnt think 'freakin' expressed my creep-out factor enough lol)

ok, as soon as you said that "headmaster" would be the past one and "dumbledore" would be the future one, you put this statement:

"Both nodded at the room and then the headmaster walked towards Harry and took the boy into his arms..."

make up your mind! lol still like the story, but i tend to notice inconsistencies and grammer stuff a lot.

oh was that older wormtail? i thought you meant the younger one. i was like, they cant kill him, that would DEFINITELY change the time line! lol