i wish it was longer, but it was really good.

the story isnt bad, but its a little too short for people to be able to review properly. Most reviews are to give criticism and to tell the author what worked and what didnt in a story. Theres not much point to review a story that is only basically one paragraph long. however, if you were to expand the concept into something longer, i bet it would get more reviews because it really is an interesting idea.

Hm, no reviews? No one likes my stories :(