I don't know if I'm suppose to take this story seriously or not, but I've got two words for you: Quotation Marks. Google it.

is there more hope so

This is a good story. But... I just couldn't finish the first chapter. You need to work on it. It's can be a great story if you use the proper grammar.

um i like it but

kat smiled softly, "You should probly use Quots for speaking."

Interesting Story! I look forward to reading the rest!

I can't read this at all! You can't tell when people are talking! Did you pass 3rd grade yet? Because you should have learned to use quotaition marks.

Example: "Shego now there is no need," muttered Drakken.

Please use propper grammar, this story has potential.

Kim should know never trust authority or Ron.

They should have given the reported a dose of sound.

I like the story a lot, may be you could break it up

into paragraphs?

O.k I don't mean to sound too critical and usually i overlook things like grammar, spelling etc... but this chapter needs a lot of revising.

For one you need to use quotation marks when a character is speaking. You also need to check up on your spelling a bit. And i don't know if it's just me being really prissy at the moment but the writing is also a little sloppy, like it reads like a list of what the characters have done or what they are doing rather than allowing the events flowing..if that makes sense?

Anyway, I don't mean to offend to either disregard my comment or accept, but i do like the premise of the story so far. And it'd be interesting as to where this will take us.

Cheers and good luck mate!