hey! .

I think so...OH! every day at 5:30 (in central) Zoids are on...but there is a new series starting! This is werid but my story will still go! ACK! GTG teacher!

This will be a bit shorter than usual as Red Liger's still out of commission, but...Yeah, i know Irvine, from the second and third series, right? Yeah...Anyway, great chapter, and I hope you write again soon!

-Darn! Forgot the torpedos!-

Later!

Phoenix of the Cold Fire (Brrrr...*(8-P...)

Hey! This is pyro-girl here and i'm sorry for not having more chapters up cause of school. Today, tomorrow, saturday, sunday, and monday will be the days new chapters will come! I'll be haveing a 4 day weekend so i have time to get this story haft done!

Ooooh, better and better...Yay!

::GrOwL::

Yep, you said it Liger! Write again soon! Luv your fic, and paint all Ligers white! Hey, wait a minute...(crash-bang-yelp-scrape-silence...)...There. Liger won't be saying anything like that _last_ comment for a while...

Man the torpedos, full speed ahead!

Later!

Phoenix (Keep writing!) of the Cold Fire (Brrrr...*(8-O...)

oh I love it this is so cool! I don't know much about Zoids but I love this story. Anyways great job!

Karigan

Ah-ha! I must agree, spelling and discriptions are always great to have, yes! Nevrmind that for now. I like your story so far! It can definitely go far! Keep up the spendacular work!

::RoarRoar::

Yep, that's true! It might be a little bit easier to read if the spacing were different, but no matter! I'm looking forward to your continuation!

Man the torpedos, full speed ahead!

Later!

Phoenix (A CW-SF cross name? Howabouts...Lupus? Or...Wolfsbane? He-he!) of the Cold Fire (Brrrr...*(8-O...)

ok so this is my first zoid fanfiction. So the chapters my change cause of work i do to them and more detail are added on. I hope you enjoy it and R&R! Also please give me ideas for a new name for a zoid like the command wolf but it looks like the shadow fox.

This was a good fic and I agree with the whole desciption thingy. And you spelt Liger and Jamie wrong. You spelled them as Ligar and Jemie, but they are really spelle Liger and Jamie. Other than that this is a cool fic. Please continue!

A bit too brief and simply in the writing.

Ex: Bit and Liger goes to hovercargo. Liger gets in. Liger turn into Jagur.

You can make it sound and read a whole lot better by describing the scenes a little more.

ex: a huge dust cloud appeared behind the racing Liger, as Bit Cloud sent it back toward the hovercargo. With one smooth motion, they enter, and the transformation process began as Liger turns into Jagur.

See what I mean, it reads a little better than what was written before. Anyway other than this, this is a great fanfic, and I'm really interested in seeing where this goes. Bye-for-now.